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That was quite nice
Really turned me on to. I would have loved to see her get Fucked though and to see Kyle's reaction to her being there and seeing what a slit Maxine turned him into
I was going to give this five stars
But I gave it four. Because I felt like it could have gone on a little bit longer...for one thing, I would have loved to see Lindsey and Frankie get it on, instead of just having her say that they did. I also would have liked to see the look on Kyle's face when he came downstairs and saw Lindsey at the bar...and again when she told him she wasn't mad, and that it actually turned her on. It was a really hot story...I wish my girl would react the way Lindsey did to that kinda thing haha
Who was dumber?
Kyle or his girlfriend? It was a difficult choice as both of them seemed to be dumber than stumps, but in the end I had to choose the stupid girlfriend. UGH!
Great Story
Fantastic job for your first story. Ignore the comment from Whiskeygood. Who by the way is a great writer. I think you don't need 2 or 3 pages for a story. Write a part 2 have Frankie and Maxine spit roast the boy friend. Have the girl suck the Trannies cocks in front of her boy friend. Introduce a bottom shemale. Write a part 2 and run with it. You did a great job.
Ended too soon! :)
It's a wonderful first effort, but I would have loved to read the encounter between Frankie and Lindsey too. I don't know that I need her and her boyfriend to confront one another yet, but that scene I definitely wanted to see. Such a tease otherwise! ;D
Thanks Everyone!
I love hearing your feedback! I do write longer and more detailed stories (most of which have been posted for sale on Amazon), but I didn't know how everyone would react on here. I am so happy that so many people enjoyed my work.
I didn't realize how many people would be interested in a Frankie/Lindsey scene! Rest assured I WILL be posting a sequel!
XOXOXO
Lara Longstaff
Kyle
So Kyle is gay and likes guys who dress up, no big deal.
great story
I really enjoyed this story and I am super jealous of Kyle. He gets the best of everything. I hope you submit more like this soon
Its ok... but
I really don't think you understand the difference between transvestites/crossdressers and transgendered or transsexual women... also, shemale, really? If you called one of my friends a shemale or a tranny, she'd fucking punch your lights out. You write really hot stuff, but try to at least have some respect for the people you are writing about
Wish I had a girlfriend like you!
While the story itself turned me on, what made it even better was knowing that a girl wrote it. What I would have liked more of, though, is if you described why it turned you on to see your boyfriend getting fucked.
Hot story
Keep writing would like more shemale fantasies! Describe how you like it in detail
More
I would like to more on sex with Frankie and Lindsay
You have talent
I don't know if you're really a female, but you brought your character to life. Please write more.
Extended Revision
is on the way!
Hang in there!
And thanks again for being so wonderful to me!
LL
What a turn-on!
Great fun and you write well! Got to appreciate those trannies! Sexy fun! Thanks and I'll be reading more of your work!
AWESOME
You write the sexiest stories and are beautiful I would love to be a third party with you in one of these fantasies
Great story!
I love this story so much! Great pace and plot.
And very believable ! Damn my hands are all messy now :)
Well done!
The enticing storyline flowed nicely with a wonderful buildup. The engaging lead character Lindsey is easily brought to life in the readers mind with her charismatic dialogue.
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