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Good start
I think you have a good start here, but it seemed a little rushed in its execution. Slowing the pace down would help out.
not romance
Too rushed for a romance, there is no seduction, they ride to the house - he takes a shower - they fuck, the end.
Good details for a quick story with a quickie. I'd love even lengthier descriptions of their sexing, thanks!
Hot And Fast***
Happens all the time. I love well written flash stories. Thanks for sharing.
Too
Damn fast for romance! This was more erotic couplings. Romance needs seduction, there was none 2*
Thank you!
Thank you all so much for your comments, including your constructive criticism! This is my first erotica and I really appreciate any feedback you have! I tried changing the category of the story from romance to erotic couplings, but couldn't figure out how. Does anyone know if it's even possible?
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