by Monsieurmelontits
You rushed the story, so much that the enjoyment of the situation was taken away by the speed.
First suggestion - get an editor
Second suggestion - plot out your stories, don't try to get everything in the first one. Especially if you plan on extra chapters.
Don't give up - just have another go at it.
Mmm, I'm very turned on, but not quite satisfied... maybe the intern should track her down and enjoy his handiwork...
I love how Bianca enthusiastically accepts her new employment and the commensurate salary.
Loved the story too, but Bianca's transformation from business bitch to blonde bimbo was almost instantaneous.
Keep up the great stories though!
I love a good bimbo story, but this one has waaaay too much blaming on the female. Total turn off.
I'd love to be made into a man's fantasy Bimbo Slut to be his sex doll!
What happens to our hot 'n' spicy little slut? Does the doctor contact the chemistry genius whose discovery transformed the modern woman/superbitch into a cute little female sex-bomb? Does she remain with the doctor, or does the doctor get bored with her and sell her to horny men elsewhere? Is she used for training in a "school for bimbos", teaching other pretty girls how to attract and give pleasure to men? Does she attract a man who takes her home and keeps her...?
There are LOTS of possibilities open to a cute, playful, and sexy bimbo eager to please and serve men.
We are sort of left hanging here. What happens now?