Bianca the Bimbo Ch. 01

Good initial idea

Good idea for a story but so poorly structured

love bimbo mc thanks

Juvenile, but you did mention it was a first...

You rushed the story, so much that the enjoyment of the situation was taken away by the speed.

First suggestion - get an editor
Second suggestion - plot out your stories, don't try to get everything in the first one. Especially if you plan on extra chapters.

Don't give up - just have another go at it.

Mmm, I'm very turned on, but not quite satisfied... maybe the intern should track her down and enjoy his handiwork...

Great

I love how Bianca enthusiastically accepts her new employment and the commensurate salary.

Fun, but a bit quick.

Loved the story too, but Bianca's transformation from business bitch to blonde bimbo was almost instantaneous.

Keep up the great stories though!

Too much woman hating

I love a good bimbo story, but this one has waaaay too much blaming on the female. Total turn off.

Lucky Bianca!

I'd love to be made into a man's fantasy Bimbo Slut to be his sex doll!