The first error is in the first sentence (his should be her) and it then gets worse. I assume that English is not your first language but even making allowances for that the story is not very good.
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Anonymous10/12/15
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Get An Editor
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Anonymous10/12/15
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Get an English-speaking editor, and keep taking ESL!
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Full of errors.
The first error is in the first sentence (his should be her) and it then gets worse. I assume that English is not your first language but even making allowances for that the story is not very good.
3 words...
Get An Editor
2
Get an English-speaking editor, and keep taking ESL!
Next time...
... get an editor. This story has mixed-up pronouns, verb tenses, sentence fragments- I couldn't get past the first paragraph.
errors....
right, I was also confused by the first sentence..... if you have trouble with the language, get someone to correct your story.
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