Goddess in the Water

Excellently done

Most of the erotica I've read here has neither solid content or the cadence appropriate for good storytelling. Yours did and I hope to read even more of your work.

You write beautifully.

I normally avoid the Science Fiction categories. I only read it because it was yours.

It is a good story, just feel that it ended a bit abruptly

Feels clipped off

I'm guessing he was already a ghost and just hadn't realized it... I don't know. The end feels like there was something small but significant left off.

Echo the other comments

I enjoyed it, but it does feel clipped off, as if the balance isn't quite right at the end.
Good luck. x