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Bland
I didn't feel any passion or real emotion from any of the characters, especially Danny. I kept reading only because the author usually comes up with something, but it never happened.
Agreed
I agree with the Anon. Was enjoying the story but then it jumped several years and seemed to just lose something. There wasn't that excitement at the end when a certain someone showed up. Still enjoyed it but not as much as I was expecting or hoping.
1*
Sad when you cannot do what you used to do so well.
JPB cannot write anymore . The ideas are gone . The plots are derived from old stories or another writers work . For example this reminds me of a story titled "Henry".
Thanks for the previous works JPB, take a vacation . Come back in a year or two .
That will help you refresh and re-charge . It will give the reader a break also , lol.
AMerryman
but finally......
While I won't say it is one of his best, it is a twist to see Pauline get the guy and keep him in the end.
Usually she's the bad girl.
Sometimes just the girl that he has no spark with or she has none with him.
Nice little soap opera
The evolution of the relationships hold our attention but nothing very exciting seems to happen.
I kept hoping someone would fall in love
instead of being together out of convenience.
Take what you can while it is available isn't much to look forward to as you grow old sharing the same house.
pauline
great to see pauline french finally married and settled down , but ibet she still has some on the side when hubby is not around lol
Bob, just let me start by saying this ......
YOU ARE THE MASTER EROTIC STORIES!!
I read all chapter and voted on each but waited till the end to put my comments out.
This could have been one of my favorites but Danny, although you tried very hard not to, was a cuckold! Pauline (I love Pauline French) is a master deceiver! She let controlled who Danny was with! She never clarified whether or not was lying about Mr Lopez at Maxims. That is another problem , her father scared off Danny but he let his daughter flirt with an older man??? Also we never got clarification why Pauline got pissed off when Danny said he knew she was having sex back at college!
She allowed Danny to have his thing with Claudine but Danny had no idea who or how many guys she was with at college. Have we heard of STD's?
Danny would have been happier if he and Pauline had pledged their exclusive love FO one another but he knew Pauline would not last four years! So he became a cuckold!
A well written relationship story.
Enjoyed reading. Many thanks.
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