This is pure awesome, like reading a futa hentai on steroids!
If the magic book is the real deal then I believe you've seen Bible Black :)
And that alone grants you 5*!
I wish you'd included the "futanari" tag in the story's description.
I know there's a community who likes to read that genre, but I'm not a member. If the stories posted here were remotely accurate, there's a hermaphrodite or two in every small neighborhood. I don't begrudge the stories catering to the fetish, but I don't bother to read them if I recognize them for what they are.
You'll get more positive feedback if you put more effort into finding your target audience, and telling readers what's in your story would accomplish that. I'm pretty confident that this story would appeal to readers who share your appreciation for the genre. I believe most readers (like me) don't make a habit of finding stories that don't appeal to them just to make a negative comment. So, might I again suggest that you'll get a better response if you market your product to the appropriate consumer?
It's right there in 1st spot among the tags for the story.
It was from the moment this tory went up today, so ample warning was given.
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Anonymous10/13/15
stopped reading in the
second paragraph, when I got to the words "F cups, on her rather thin hourglass frame."
Yes there are some women with large F cup breasts but normally not on a thin woman. If you had said they were on a fat woman or a porn star who has had enhancements, I wouldn't say anything.
Nothing ruins a story more than a man with a 10 inch cock or a thin/slim woman with F cup breasts or bigger. It's just not part of everyday life!
I am referring to the story description: "A mom of two returns home to finds her world upside down." There's no mention of "shemale", "futanari" or "hermaphrodite". That's why I wrote "I wish you'd included the 'futanari' tag in the story's DESCRIPTION." You know? The 'description'? The brief sentence after the story's title? That 'describes' the story?
I don't think I've ever clicked on a story to skip to the final page to read "Tags For This Story", BEFORE reading the actual story. I don't know how you read YOUR erotica, but I think I speak for the majority of readers here when I say that. So. Hmm. There you go.
I can't expect the author to cram every possible warning or tag in the description. It7 has a limited space you know. That's why the tags are for. It's not dozens of pages long so you only had to scroll down a bit to see them anyhow.
And to answer your question, yes I do exactly that. Skip to the last page, check the tags, if it's something I detest I return to the list and search continues.
Unfortunately, you're using common sense. Captain Fap critiqued my comment, which also used common sense, but now he's painted himself into a corner and he'll never admit he could have been wrong. I mean, really? Who else would skip to the end of a story to see what "tags" are included before going BACK to the beginning? I'm sure there are others out there, but it's just a (in his case) whiny minority. I wouldn't waste any more time trying to convince him what a losing argument he's trying to defend. I'm pretty sure just about everyone else who read my first comment on this story understood what I was trying to communicate.
Might be so but there is still a difference to including in the description with limited space and a paragraph at the start of the story. I have zero problems with the latter, but the description one might be pushing it.
I do apologise if my rationing somehow offended you for that was not my intention. I do however stand by my decision and my way of searching through LE. Too each his own I guess.
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Anonymous10/19/15
Amazing!
This is undoubtedly the best one this month! It's hard finding ones like this, especially anything recent. But great work! I hope for more, NastyFlame!
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Anonymous10/26/15
Good Read
The Theme after a bit was very good however, some explanation of the daughter with a penis should have been developed and this story should go on for many chapters to go along with your title. This could be developed into one of the best combination Theme stories on this site.
Add more chapters having the horny mom truly come under the spell of her daughter to satisfy her own sexual needs by being fucked by her daughter; and develop more on what the other daughter intends to do with her spells. Maybe to control both mother and sister. Now that would be hot, sister, sister incest, mother daughter, well you get my drift.
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Anonymous10/30/15
Excellent
I certainly hope there will be a follow up on this story !! :) please write more :)
As far as futanari stories go, this was great. I'm anxious to read the next chapter!
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Anonymous03/31/16
Great Story, Not My First Tme Reading Either
You've written a great story and I wish you luck in your future writings. Don't let negatives get ya down when they come around.
Love how a Anonymous was saying men with 10 inch dicks aren't an everyday thing cause my immediate reaction was to glance down at my 9 inch. Still not 10 I know but still.
English
prommising
This is a verry prommissing start to a potentially excellent story. I cant wait for the rest
I am speechless
This is pure awesome, like reading a futa hentai on steroids!
If the magic book is the real deal then I believe you've seen Bible Black :)
And that alone grants you 5*!
Please do more soon!
I wish you'd included the "futanari" tag in the story's description.
I know there's a community who likes to read that genre, but I'm not a member. If the stories posted here were remotely accurate, there's a hermaphrodite or two in every small neighborhood. I don't begrudge the stories catering to the fetish, but I don't bother to read them if I recognize them for what they are.
You'll get more positive feedback if you put more effort into finding your target audience, and telling readers what's in your story would accomplish that. I'm pretty confident that this story would appeal to readers who share your appreciation for the genre. I believe most readers (like me) don't make a habit of finding stories that don't appeal to them just to make a negative comment. So, might I again suggest that you'll get a better response if you market your product to the appropriate consumer?
nice new angle
part 2 has mom wanting to try anal again then taking it in the pussy then sis gets in the pic
@ Epiphany_Jones
It's right there in 1st spot among the tags for the story.
It was from the moment this tory went up today, so ample warning was given.
stopped reading in the
second paragraph, when I got to the words "F cups, on her rather thin hourglass frame."
Yes there are some women with large F cup breasts but normally not on a thin woman. If you had said they were on a fat woman or a porn star who has had enhancements, I wouldn't say anything.
Nothing ruins a story more than a man with a 10 inch cock or a thin/slim woman with F cup breasts or bigger. It's just not part of everyday life!
Captain Fapulous:
I am referring to the story description: "A mom of two returns home to finds her world upside down." There's no mention of "shemale", "futanari" or "hermaphrodite". That's why I wrote "I wish you'd included the 'futanari' tag in the story's DESCRIPTION." You know? The 'description'? The brief sentence after the story's title? That 'describes' the story?
I don't think I've ever clicked on a story to skip to the final page to read "Tags For This Story", BEFORE reading the actual story. I don't know how you read YOUR erotica, but I think I speak for the majority of readers here when I say that. So. Hmm. There you go.
more please
Awesome start, looking forward to reading more
@ Epiphany_Jones
I can't expect the author to cram every possible warning or tag in the description. It7 has a limited space you know. That's why the tags are for. It's not dozens of pages long so you only had to scroll down a bit to see them anyhow.
And to answer your question, yes I do exactly that. Skip to the last page, check the tags, if it's something I detest I return to the list and search continues.
Huge
Cock, Huge Tits! Can't make a story that's real?
Good Fun...
Hey, come on, this is a good horny fantasy.. More cock.. More cum.. More cunt..
Try using a desription
or summary sentance or paragraph at the start of your story.
IE: Note: This story contains futanari, anal, and Mom/daughter incest
Little things like that at the top of your post help readers a lot to avoid things that they don't appreciate.
To: Try using a description
Unfortunately, you're using common sense. Captain Fap critiqued my comment, which also used common sense, but now he's painted himself into a corner and he'll never admit he could have been wrong. I mean, really? Who else would skip to the end of a story to see what "tags" are included before going BACK to the beginning? I'm sure there are others out there, but it's just a (in his case) whiny minority. I wouldn't waste any more time trying to convince him what a losing argument he's trying to defend. I'm pretty sure just about everyone else who read my first comment on this story understood what I was trying to communicate.
Might be so but there is still a difference to including in the description with limited space and a paragraph at the start of the story. I have zero problems with the latter, but the description one might be pushing it.
I do apologise if my rationing somehow offended you for that was not my intention. I do however stand by my decision and my way of searching through LE. Too each his own I guess.
Amazing!
This is undoubtedly the best one this month! It's hard finding ones like this, especially anything recent. But great work! I hope for more, NastyFlame!
Good Read
The Theme after a bit was very good however, some explanation of the daughter with a penis should have been developed and this story should go on for many chapters to go along with your title. This could be developed into one of the best combination Theme stories on this site.
Add more chapters having the horny mom truly come under the spell of her daughter to satisfy her own sexual needs by being fucked by her daughter; and develop more on what the other daughter intends to do with her spells. Maybe to control both mother and sister. Now that would be hot, sister, sister incest, mother daughter, well you get my drift.
More
Excellent
I certainly hope there will be a follow up on this story !! :) please write more :)
Impressive.
There's like 10 different fetishes in here.
5/5
more please
more please and keep them coming, just make them longer each chapter should be at the least 2-3 pages.
Hot
As far as futanari stories go, this was great. I'm anxious to read the next chapter!
Great Story, Not My First Tme Reading Either
You've written a great story and I wish you luck in your future writings. Don't let negatives get ya down when they come around.
Love how a Anonymous was saying men with 10 inch dicks aren't an everyday thing cause my immediate reaction was to glance down at my 9 inch. Still not 10 I know but still.
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