The Grudge

Make it a series.

Good bones you have here. However it was rushed at the end....but I guess that was due to the fact that you are contemplating if it should be a series. I would love to read more about these two.

Promising

I agree and think the end was rushed a bit, but this story has a lot of potential. I think you should continue with it and see where it goes. Thank you.

Continue!!

Like everyone else said the story seemed a bit rushed but i really want you to continue!

Interesting

Told simply, but has the ring of truth hidden in it. Very likable story.

Keep it coming girl.....

Nicely done....ending could've been better.

I like where this is going ...

Would love to read more about these two...

Keep going and it may help to have someone look over work.. so that way you can work on ur plot and story line.. now don't get me wrong I'm liking this story too just like your other two you wrote.. so keep going and stay positive and don't let people stop you from doing what you love to do..

Lovely Lead in

I'm looking forward to more. Way to build up to that apology and have it all flood out from there. :)

Awwww..

Super cute! Please continue!

Great Start!

And keep it going!

What a great beginning

Please continue this story I love the beginning and would keep reading if you keep writing. You have a gift, so keep on giving.

Not bad.

Awesome

Very nice!!! Keep em coming!!!

Long winded beginning, rushed ending, haven't talked since 4th grade and suddenly he's sincere in his apology and wants to make love? Doesn't make sense and its too rushed. Surely she can't be that easy?

keep it going its really good so far!

like like like

please continue

Good Start!!

More please.

but really

denchers

Didn't your spell check catch that?
If you mean fake teeth that is dentures, at least in English.

Need more!

Good start, more needed, keep it going!

PLEASE GIVE ME MORE

Loving this so much. Please continue and finish this gorgeous love story.

Please finish this story! I can tell it would be fantastic!

Series, series, series...

I think the title states my vote. I like how you built history, the main characters, and the annoying sub characters. Good setting for a good story.

Unreal

No sane person would agree to 'make love' right after chatting for a few hours. The fuck you writing?