Losing the House but Winning Mom 03

It is getting more interesting with each chapter

but at this stage it is more like mom is winning him. he seems so overly reluctant that it is starting to feel tenuous.

Enjoying it

Great build up and can't wait for the next installment! 5 Stars, you are a fantastic author which is why you grace my favorites list. Thanks for sharing.

Five Stars

Another great chapter. Please keep them coming. Thanks

Interesting and exciting

5 star. Since there is some humor and laughing, please add in your next coming chapters about the son confessing to his mom that he loves to sniff her dirty panties. And they have some humor about it that the mom was quite embarrased that the son smelled her musky pussy scent on the crotch of her panties at the same time flattered about it. And eventually let him continue sniffs her dirty panties openly until she becomes comfortable about it and it progressed to letting him sniffs it while she still wearing it and eventually let him sniffs her bare hairy pussy.

I hope you consider this suggestions and I know you can make this sound even more erotic with your talent with flowery, excitng, erotic words.
We used to exchanged e-mail messages before.

Very erotic. You definitely got my attention, not to mention getting aroused. Great job.

~ragged breathing~

Mmmmmm...you are truly inspiring, SJP.

I am moving on to 04 with a BIG smile on my face...the weaving of feelings and thoughts is so engaging...but I hope I get to see/hear/read more from her point of view, along the way, too!

Just an observational criticism

I'm not complaining that you haven't gotten to the sex yet, nor am I complaining about your complaining about the government. It's just that I'm noticing that for every step you take forward you're taking 2 steps back. Your narrative is very repetitive. In your first chapter you mentioned 401ks in about 4 different paragraphs. In your second chapter you mentioned several times that the neighbors watched but didn't help. It's as though you're going out of your way to keep the story from progressing. For every sentence of dialogue there is another 3 or 4 paragraphs of narrative. On the first page of this chapter when the mother is undressing in front of the son he asks "Mom, what are you doing?" That's one sentence. And it takes another 4 paragraphs of narrative for her to reply "I'm getting ready for bed." Just one sentence. I'm not a horny teenager looking for a quick fuck session but my brain keeps screaming "Get the lead out!" Don't these two have ANYTHING to talk about with each other aside from getting screwed over? Do 100% of their thoughts have to stay in their heads while they can only utter single sentences to each other? There are a lot of ways the characters could have driven the story further without being sexual but you seem to refuse to let that happen. I'm sorry if this came off bitchy but after 3 chapters I couldn't hold it in any longer.