by Tom lancey 49
LOL! I love to play pool and in fact enter a lot of tournaments or bet to make extra cash. One thing I manage to do quite often is get chicks to fuck me if I win. Great story!
I have to say that, having a similar experience in my real life, you surely hit the nail right on the head in terms of action and passion. You seem to have a great talent--I can't wait to see what else you'll bring to Literotica.
Need to correct spelling, punctuation and grammar, and break paragraphs. But, pretty good,overall...
it was good and detailed but it was disgusting. it was your mom and your sister. incest is disgusting and i could never be turned on by any of my siblings/relatives.
This was a good story, although it could have used some better proofreading: there a few spelling and grammar errors. This definitely won't have an effect when I'm replaying it in my mind later.
To the person who found this story "disgusting": stories on Literotica are categorized for a reason. Did you go searching for an incest story just so you could criticize it?