Son Makes Mother His Slave

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nice one

i love it cant wait for part 2 5 stars

damn!

That is so hot keep coming I'll be waiting for chapter 2....;)

Can't wait for 2

This one was so good can't wait for chapter 2
5*

cant wait chapter 2

Can't fuck dad?

Kids pipe dream. *

Good Start .

You have a good story please keep it going can't wait to see what's next .Gave it a 5*.

Great submissive story

Can't wait for the next chapter

good start

Can't wait for next installment. It will be easy to keep Peterson away from his mom with the threat of the tape. It should also get him an A in calculus. This one has lots of promise for some good stuff. Just keep it real.

Can't wait for the next part.

I normally don't like stories where a man dominates a woman. But to dominate your mother got me hard as a rock. I can't wait to see how you handle the Slut.

HMm, I never liked Calculus teachers...perhaps Peterson gets dominated by male principal

Great read...looking fwd to next "submission".

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PLEASE-PLEASE-PLEASE

Please make the son in the 11-12-13 inch category...Him having a massive cock will be the end-all to this great storyline!

What Should Kasey Do?

What sexy stuff do you want to see Kasey do in further chapters? ;) I love hearing feedback from readers!

DAMN GOOD!

I loved this beginning. I wanted to do the same thing knowing that she was cheating, but my ass hole dad was also cheating on her! I am looking forward to the next chapter!

decent start, but......

You should be careful to not gloss over or abbreviate the sex too much....a little more detail is a good thing

excellent start

1. I would have the Jacob rethink about Kasey not sleeping with the husband as that might but up red flag. 2. If Jacob is going to be her master and do it right he might want to do so internet research on the subject. 3. You might want to have Jacob take slave kasey to a piercing shop and have her nipples, both her labia, and the hood of her clit pierced to show his ownership of his slave. 4. Also Jacob might start in with so light bondage on his slave kasey which over time could be expanded on and then he could the start taking her out and showing off at BD club scenes after her training.

Too quick

Good idea but you realized it too quickly.
Try to stretch your story. If Kasey gives a BJ, don't make her son cum in 2 secondes, make it last and give more description. Same thing with the blackmail, where are the moral dilemas ? Sure Jacob is angry but it's a huge step to blackmail one's mother. Same thing with Kasey, even if she needs to be dominated, fucking her son is one hell of a taboo. In two minutes she transformed from a responsible mother to a willing and devoted sex slave.

With your story, we don't have time to bond with the characters so it's an enjoyable read but not a memorable one.

Dad May Be A 'Nice', BUT?

Great Start on Son Dominating Mom, But Telling her That she Doesn't Sleep With Dad Might Be Too Soon? More Chapters Will Explain This?

liked it till the end.

Liked the story and liked Jacob till the end, then he turned out to be an even bigger bastard than Mr Peterson was, and of course his mother goes from getting her fetish on behind her hubby's back (while admitting he is a great guy but just not as sexually dominant as she needs) to flat out fucking him over.
If I'm Jacob, besides having my fun with her (since she seems to need it), I make her call Mr Peterson and tell him to go fuck himself and never come back, and I make her do this with my cum all over her face, then I make sure and order my new slave to serve Dad hand and foot and always make all holes available for him at the drop of a hat when he is home just as she will always now do for me when he is not home.

Huh?

That's it? Just the beginning with no middle and no ending?
You can do better than this.