Strawberry - A Shanghai Girl in America Ch. 01

You are the sexiest writer of them all!

I love your "voice." This latest story of yours was a wonderful experience.

So glad you kept writing, you have a really fun style!

Great use of language

I loved how you infused Chinese into the story and even left a small list of words. It really made it feel so authentic, from the restaurant, to their kisses and sex. I did not expect the ending with both guys, though. I really did feel for her!

Love how you wrote it. I hope to read more like this or maybe even more chapters. An easy 5. :)

loving it, keep writing :D

seriously love your writing
i'm looking forward to more of your stories :)

Thankyou so much for such nice comments....

Thanks so much all of you for the feedback (and the compliments). It`s a wonderful way to start the day when you get such nice comments. I`m also thinking of a sequel to `Strawberry`s Halloween` - working title is `Strawberry`s Sundae` - if you`d like to see that, let me know and I`ll write it.

If you like this story and you haven`t read any of mine before, I have a few more posted (just check my profile). There`s also a couple more on the way (a very sad one called `Because You Were My Youth` and another I`m calling `Chinese Takeout`. And of course I am working on the next couple of chapters of `Hayley`s Party`.

Thank you!

Thanks for the language lesson! And again what a hot and great story! I hope you enjoyed writing it as much as I did reading it!

A for Awesome!

Chloe, this was fei chang hao (Very good)! haha

Loved the story

As a laowai/gwailo/yangguizi who has lived in Greater China for 34 years I love how you have incorporated Chinese into the story, My ji ba/di ke enjoyed it too

Loved the story

Thankyou so much :) - and StrawberryCh. 04 ("Strawberry Under the Mistletoe - Part I - "I'll Keep You Warm") should be up on LIT for next weekend (Sept 10th). It started as a single story about Strawberry going to Alan's family home for Christmas but just grew. Started on Strawberry Ch. 05 (Under the Mistletoe - Part II - "Dim Sum in Duluth") as well, but that'll take a bit longer.

Great

For those who have a need for some quick action I highly recommend this one. This story still has good character development. It has a great drawn out sex scene that feels real. I think Chloe is possibly one of the most expressive writers on this site consistently dealing with a young girls sexuality and her conflicting emotions.