How She Draped My Net Around Her

Nice Start

Hopefully we will see this continue.

a bit childish and way to fast

unless she is disposable a few hours is way to quick

Promising Beginning

The first installment was enjoyable and obviously needs to be followed with subsequent work. You have allowed for plenty of exploration into the growth of the relationship, how sex will fit into their D/s life, and how this will affect their work relationship.
May I also suggest an editor as there were a few issues with homonyms which made parts a bit confusing.

Interesting scenario, but I don't believe that any girl would trust any guy, merely based upon observing his actions at work. Develop the relationship.

Thanks

Thanks for the quick comments. It's true, the story is not perfect - it's challenging to write a short story, to make it realistic, but also to give it some loading. I will try to use constructive comments in the future.

As you may have noticed, I'm no native English speaker. Before submitting this story, I tried to contact Voluntary Editors, but for some reason I never got a reply - not even a copy from the message I wrote. This gave me the idea that maybe I did something wrong, or maybe something is wrong with my account. Therefore, I finally decided to submit it as is was, and got some useful suggestions from Laurel. Please contact me if you feel for correcting the issues with language; I may make some corrections.

Nice start

Plausible maybe but not unplausible for the start of a relationship

great :)

I really liked this story. It really arouses me because this is what I want as a submissive woman. it isn't abusive and I found it very sexy. I really want to hear what happens next? may I ask, are you a man? because you have done really well getting into the mind of a woman if you are. very enjoyable, thank you for sharing it

Your Valentine's day story brought me here, and I'm not disappointed. I'm fascinated. I like how reading your writings illuminates realistic thought processes and interactions for me more than so many other 'fantasies'. These two characters give me an insight into how things like this might get started without abuse. And it's hot.

Dear AliceKane2017, I always wondered how one could end up in such a relationship; BDSM has always had a great attraction to my fantasies; even before 'Sixty Shades' came out. It must be great, to have this ultimate trust in someone; to give yourself away; to be able to show how much you are willing to endure for the one you love. And on the other side; it must also be great to get this gift from your love, but also a heavy responsibility.

I came up with this story line, honed it over time, and finally wrote it down.

It was supposed to be a one-time-only submission, but I got persuaded to continue. In time, it moved in directions I never imagined. Spoiler alert - there are some story plot holes...