I gave 'Part 1' of this story a solid '5', when it first showed up. The heat that the author generated was enormous. The word pictures he/she painted, to capture Janet's thoughts as she slowly moved from contemplating the idea of becoming her son's lover, to actually taking that final step and joining him in bed, were among the most vivid I can recall reading on Literotica.
Unfortunately, some people don't know when to quit, or how to leave well enough alone. This part of the story began as a solid '5', but - with the last 5 paragraphs, and the son's apparent desire to share her with not one but two of his buddies - it took a rapid nose-dive that was only stopped by Literotica's insistence that ratings can go no lower than '1'. Had Lit permitted negative numbers, I'd have used them to show my displeasure with the author's decision to transform Janet from a truly loving mother into a common whore.
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Anonymous10/27/15
just keep building the tension
You just keep building the tension between them, and to end with whether or not she'll take his friends as her lover just begs another chapter be written.
I'm not rating this, but I'm pretty disappointed too with the [quote] author's decision to transform Janet from a truly loving mother into a common whore.[/quote]
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Anonymous10/27/15
why would a boy ever want to share his mother's babyhole with anyone else?
Where's the logic in that? Has he become tired of it already? For a son, his mother's vagina is a thing apart, the most beautiful, most endlessly fascinating and appealing object he's ever seen. To him, his mother's cunt is simply awesome. He loves every aspect of it, and he has a special proprietary feeling towards it. After all, the boy came out of that magical orifice between his mother's thighs. In a very real sense, it belongs to him. Very naturally, he deeply resents any other male's member defiling it (though if dad's still around he may have to put up with it). Only one male's penis truly has the right to enter it, only one male's semen should get splattered all over its tender pink walls. And they don't belong to his dumbass friends.
What was a very good story turned to shit with the last five paragraphs.
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Anonymous11/28/15
Ryan is a considerate son.
Ryan doesn't want to rip his mom a new asshole with his huge cock, that takes some restraint. I'm sure Janet's pussy is as tight, or tighter than her ass is anyway. I wouldn't want my friends to be checking out, or fucking, my mom's pussy though. If Janet ends up with a baby bump, it's going to be very hard for her to explain in church. In that case, she might want to quit going.
Like a few other commenters, I really don't like the prospect of adding the son's friends to the mix. Too bad because it was going great before that. I won't be checking out Part 3.
Perhaps ch3 should be read first before making judgement about where story line is going
read ch3 then make comment!
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Anonymous01/02/16
Don't need to read chapter 3
To know where it's going! You just told us all exactly where it's going, in the last few paragraphs. Most fans of this genre don't like the characters to share or swap with outsiders, as they feel it takes away something from the taboo eroticism they like.
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Stop
Don't stop
What a let-down!
I gave 'Part 1' of this story a solid '5', when it first showed up. The heat that the author generated was enormous. The word pictures he/she painted, to capture Janet's thoughts as she slowly moved from contemplating the idea of becoming her son's lover, to actually taking that final step and joining him in bed, were among the most vivid I can recall reading on Literotica.
Unfortunately, some people don't know when to quit, or how to leave well enough alone. This part of the story began as a solid '5', but - with the last 5 paragraphs, and the son's apparent desire to share her with not one but two of his buddies - it took a rapid nose-dive that was only stopped by Literotica's insistence that ratings can go no lower than '1'. Had Lit permitted negative numbers, I'd have used them to show my displeasure with the author's decision to transform Janet from a truly loving mother into a common whore.
just keep building the tension
You just keep building the tension between them, and to end with whether or not she'll take his friends as her lover just begs another chapter be written.
Gotta agree with anon #1
I'm not rating this, but I'm pretty disappointed too with the [quote] author's decision to transform Janet from a truly loving mother into a common whore.[/quote]
why would a boy ever want to share his mother's babyhole with anyone else?
Where's the logic in that? Has he become tired of it already? For a son, his mother's vagina is a thing apart, the most beautiful, most endlessly fascinating and appealing object he's ever seen. To him, his mother's cunt is simply awesome. He loves every aspect of it, and he has a special proprietary feeling towards it. After all, the boy came out of that magical orifice between his mother's thighs. In a very real sense, it belongs to him. Very naturally, he deeply resents any other male's member defiling it (though if dad's still around he may have to put up with it). Only one male's penis truly has the right to enter it, only one male's semen should get splattered all over its tender pink walls. And they don't belong to his dumbass friends.
Well....
Just as bad as the first story but for different reasons.
I agree with anon#1.
What was a very good story turned to shit with the last five paragraphs.
Ryan is a considerate son.
Ryan doesn't want to rip his mom a new asshole with his huge cock, that takes some restraint. I'm sure Janet's pussy is as tight, or tighter than her ass is anyway. I wouldn't want my friends to be checking out, or fucking, my mom's pussy though. If Janet ends up with a baby bump, it's going to be very hard for her to explain in church. In that case, she might want to quit going.
A growing consensus?
Like a few other commenters, I really don't like the prospect of adding the son's friends to the mix. Too bad because it was going great before that. I won't be checking out Part 3.
Perhaps ch3 should be read first before making judgement about where story line is going
read ch3 then make comment!
Don't need to read chapter 3
To know where it's going! You just told us all exactly where it's going, in the last few paragraphs. Most fans of this genre don't like the characters to share or swap with outsiders, as they feel it takes away something from the taboo eroticism they like.
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