Ready Maid Family Bk. 02

It's still lousy, Please stop

Tired lazy plot, poorly edited. Why? jahoo

Enjoyed the story. Please continue

Don't stop.....

Good story line, well presented and written.

i think what was established in your first entry was much better than this one. you just threw them into separate couples and really just tried writing it off as almost convenience for them and the plot. it would have been better to see Sara take much longer than a week to integrate herself into the group. the whirlwind aspect was fine to move the story along, but whirlwind every time a new character is introduced. Sara and Sylvia shouldn't exist as a couple. Main three should have been explored a lot more than you did since you portrayed this as a harem like tale.

Oh well...

Yeah, I can already tell that ya'll ain't gonna like Book Four. It's fulla turmoil and strife, and it's generally all over the place like an emotional roller coaster.

But I write for me, then share it with other people. I like the comments, they help me grow as a writer. but I am, for all intents and purposes, an amateur.

So keep in mind, you get what you paid for. So far, all this has cost is a little of your time. Hopefully, my stories distract you from what's going on in the real world, if only for a little while.