Over The Years

This story wasn't bad, but...

This story wasn't bad, but it is too short and has some unexplained facts in it: 1st - From nowhere she goes from a conservative wife to a high level slut? 2nd - She was ready to endanger two marriages for an easy fuck? Yes, two marriages, because one thing is a fantasy another very different reality...How would her husband react in reality? One thing was to show some views and another to fuck another man in their home, maybe in their bed...3rd - To sent the husband away, wasn't his fantasy!!! He is a voyeur and being out of the picture wasn't his cup of tea...How would he react to that? 4th - What kind of a friend was she? Ready to fuck a friend's husband? This is the contrary of all he said about his wife...So 2*

Agree the story is good for a flash story, but really needs a followup. Lots of ways to go with it and none are bad since it is yours to write. It does seem a bit of a radical change in her personality, but then again maybe Jacques has been sampling his wife's charms for a while now and this is just the "coming out" so to speak. Or, perhaps she is just yanking his chain to get a reaction and absolutely nothing is going to happen while he is gone, assuming he accepts her proposal to take a little drive while she stays home? He might well say OK honey I will take a powder and she gets mad as hell at him?

Just stupid

Thank God it was short. My IQ fell to single digits while I was reading. It might take me years to recover if it had been longer.

The 'change of pace' was too sudden and extreme

Nearly all of the story is a well observed believable tale. Then in the last paragraph with no obvious motivation Jane goes from someone who wouldn't wear revealing clothes in public to someone who kicks her husband out of the house to have adulterous sex with a close family friend? That just totally disconnected me from the story and knocked my vote down from five to three.

WAIT! WHAT???

So she goes from being modest with the clothes she wears and the next minute she going to fuck another man? Where did that come from? Okay until the surprising and shocking end. His next words would have been that if she fucked another man, there marriage was over. I'm not sure whether you thought this was a clever ending, but it wasn't. It was an unexplained, 180 degree turnaround for the wife and as such, it made no sense and ruined the whole story. No stars for absolute drivel.

Believable

I find the whole thing believable and exciting but the ending is a cliffhanger. Finish out what happened when you "left" (or hid) in the same fashion you've built the story and you'll have a winner.

Made me wet

Please don'the make us wait too long for the next chapter

over-the-years

Different strokes for different folks.

There's a need for a little back-fill which can come latter. I too, and amazed at the jump from conservative to cheating...unless Gisselle is in on it and has encouraged her to be bolder. But hey, the birthday message did allude to some intriguing possibilities. Nice foreshadowing with that. I knew it was coming, but not sure what. That gets high marks.

Childish fantasy. When will you write the jackoff scene?

Never mind.

Ignore

Ignore the negatives - they only like causing pain for the wife stories. I'm thinking he loops back and chapter 2 is what he finds.

The Story Sneaks Up on One

I hope you write a second chapter!

Nice story

Really does need a second and more chapters, I enjoyed her turning the tables, perhaps she has wanted to follow her own desires for a long time, just needed the right situation, love it when shy conservative wives break out... enjoyable read...

There are more interesting

Much interesting stories when the conservative shy wife goes wild and the husband finds younger, better second/next wife after the divorce.

5 stars

Continue with part 2 for more- please.

Excellent

For some time now I have wished my own wife would be more "relaxed" I suppose is the word. I don't want her to actually engage in sex, but the idea of her doing accidental shows is something that gets me going.
This past week we spent some time at a casino hotel, and finally when a masseur came over that was not worried about his license, she allowed quite a bit.
I think I will go try and write that story.

Great Story

What a fun story and I hope there are more chapters! I love to expose my wife and she loves it too and it has led to some very amazing encounters. I would love to share those times! You can reach me by email at florida_beaches@aol.com

A Great One Page Story...

What an immensely, delightful short story. A second chapter? What for? to add so much as an additional sentence will destroy the almost perfect harmony you have achieved between Jane and James. Rather than ruin this pastiche by entering into cliches as surely as a chapter two must start a new story. Thank you Jamesforjane for sharing your story with us and thank you Jane for being his inspiration.

beautifully done

Fantastic

Please keep up the excellent work!!

EXCELLENT

VERY WELL DONE -- well written, good descriptions, not too chatty (like many of this website), Not too long - really well done. Perhaps a follow up with husband trying to influence a client where again the wife can act like unaware of show providing. But that is just wishful thinking by me -- excellent story - THANK YOU