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You go!
Well done and presented. Keep going.
Excellent
A story that is interesting and will be a fun ride.
Interesting
Pink strand of hair from just a kiss. What's going to happen when things get more heated? I look forward to finding out.
Read this on another site
Five parts.... no sex. Good concept but no end or action.... at all.
excellent build up
Enjoying the tension, build up, and mystery.
Interesting story line
This has the potential to develop into a great story. Keep working on it and I'll be looking for the rest.
not erotic; not that good as a story
no sex. why are you posting here? and jumping around between loosely connected story lines is more annoying than clever. if you made it this far, do not waste your time and read the rest.
Really excited
To see where you go with this. I know you have all 6 our existing chapters on another site but will wait for them to post here and hopefully your new stuff.
Many More Please!
The 2 Are Just Getting Together! Great Start!
Zzzzzzzzzz Oh So Boring
Brian's charm is supposed to bring him a harem, yet we're two chapters in, with only one potential partner (maybe two if you count Emily from Ch. 1), and still no sex. Just how long is this story to be if it takes a couple of chapters for each new girl before anything sexual happens?
I consider myself an anime fan, but I can't understand why this story is scoring so high with no sex to speak of so far. This IS an erotica site after all. So far, it's been all "tease" and no "please", and really not even that much in the way of "tease" either.
I'll give Ch. 3 a try, but if there are not serious amounts of bodily fluids swapped, I'll be done with this series.
Some readers suffer from very short attention spans and a need to stroke 2 paragraphs...
....into the thing. But most appreciate that you're telling a story with more sophistication and interest than the usual juvenile fuck-fest.
I for one, am thoroughly enjoying the development of the story and the characters. You do this with unusual care (for this venue, anyway) and I applaud both your work and your story. Very much looking forward to the next installment!
Oh, and I'm very certain that I want babies with Stephanie. I always found the shy girls to be so.....passionate.
Thank you.
The hambeast comment...
threw off my enjoyment a bit. No need to be nasty.
Me likey
Just on the second chapter and thoroughly enjoying the story, I prefer a story that happens to have sex in it rather than a story solely about sex. If it has geeks and conventions in the story... Well I couldn't have imagined it better myself. Thank you for the story
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