I never finished the story because the grammar was so bad it became a distraction. I assume English is not your first language? Things like "he had to drove back to his wife", it's 'Drive' . I even had to rewrite drove as even my phone corrected it to drive! Every now and then is fine but there is too much here. Always proof read or do a grammar check on word.
The story was ok but it didn't flow well as there were sudden jumps. For example in the story you say suddenly she was in only her fish net stockings. Write about how she got there, did she undress herself? Did the husband or the lover do it for her?
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dubass annony is at it again. He she it IT reads everyone of these stories and then cries
like the little queer he is. I gave this a 5 for effort and for pissing off the asshole of Lit, dear anomy!!
Is a grammar check that hard
I never finished the story because the grammar was so bad it became a distraction. I assume English is not your first language? Things like "he had to drove back to his wife", it's 'Drive' . I even had to rewrite drove as even my phone corrected it to drive! Every now and then is fine but there is too much here. Always proof read or do a grammar check on word.
The story was ok but it didn't flow well as there were sudden jumps. For example in the story you say suddenly she was in only her fish net stockings. Write about how she got there, did she undress herself? Did the husband or the lover do it for her?
Thank you
Do you want to be my editor, open minded?
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