A Chance Meeting

Start of something good

This has the essentials of a good opening chapter. It grabs the interest and raises questions the reader wants answered. The main one of course is where is the girl but there's also the intriguing "emergency" that suggests the hero knew enough about his friend to not require details of before handing over his car keys. Don't keep us waiting or leave for FTDS to complete.

Good start of a story! As it stands, if this is the very end of the story, it needs at least one sentence to close it in my mind. (a boring one might be "and I never saw her again.") Or as McMahonS mentioned, it is an excellent start of a longer story! You have so many mysteries in this that you should be able to continue the story!

Please write some more! And have fun as you do write!

Could Be Interesting***

Waiting for Part 02. If not what a waste.

AN INTERESTING START TO A GOOD STORY, PLEASE CONTINUE.

GUNRUNNER

i always enjoy reading tales from authors for whom English is a 2nd or 3rd language
unusual places , unusual circumstances , diferent cultures.
..
very much looking forward to the continuation of this story

thank you note

thank you to all people who took time to post a feedback to my first story.
the comments encourage me to write more and continue to this story.

I am looking forward to some ideas on how to continue the story from you readers.

So far so good

I hope the author can figure out how to continue this story as it is really an unfinished tale.