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Coldsteel Ch. 01

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by SirCarl11/06/15

Good, but.....

Way to short. Do continue on.

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by ap2tech11/08/15

I agree

Way too short but with potential.
My usual comments with stories like this are, more background on where the powers come from. How did he get the ring? How long did it take him to get used to them?
These are just a few questions to be answered for a full story. If you are doing multiple parts please flesh out your work as you go.

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by Tagluy11/09/15

Explanations and background

Sorry, ap2tech, you're going to be disappointed. The how and why of it is of no interest to me at all. Feel free to imagine that it's aliens or magic or whatever you like, it doesn't matter.

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