And Hubby Makes Three

A little advice

Not to sound mean but you had no pacing, no back sorry, or no real reason as to why the soon would want to fuck his mother. You story was alright, but I've read other quickies that were written better. You have potential so don't give up.

good start

Good story, well written, but it was a little bland. It read too much like a play-by-play, without a lot of emotion.

Try to include some back story on why the mother would be receptive and why the son would be so bold.

Include dialogue so the reader gets a sense of what they are feeling and how they are dealing with the concept of fucking a family member.

Keep up the good work!

I liked the story, despite it being short and a little factual. Don't be discouraged, you obviously have potential for these things, especially if you're drawing on a basis of personal experience! Do tell us more.

litfan2418

Please write us a story so we can see how you would do it..
Thanks

Thanks for the feedback.

I'm doing a rewrite, and will post it as soon as I'm finished.

I want to be in her place

It will be a great time when you get double Penetration's specially by husband and son

Shaun is the kind of father all boys should have

He's not jealous and possessive, instead he's totally willing to give his boy a son's share of his own mother's cunt. Jason is over the moon about this, as any son would be, and mom is the clear winner, with two lusty horny males, her husband and her boy, with their big fat cocks to tear her cunt and asshole to pieces. There's so much great dirty fun families can have if they just open their minds and use what they've got between their legs on their nearest and dearest!