A night in the life of married couple in love...3*
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Anonymous11/08/15
Nice story - lucky man
Be grateful for what you got. My wife is 36A (nice legs, shame about the tits). In bed she waits for her divorced sister to phone some nights, and gives me a blowjob while she's listening. That's her revenge for her sister having bigger boobs.
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Anonymous11/08/15
An editor would have helped
Then drop the "true story" garbage. You're on a porn site on the world wide web. True or not, no one believes a word coming out of your mouth and the "true" tag does nothing for the storyline besides make us laugh. The story itself was mediocre. Nothing clever or original and the sex was ho hum. Not too bad for a first effort, but nothing really entertaining.
But as soon as you hit the 36H I called bullshit. A 36h {if it even exists} is past the recommended breast reduction size {36f} and the woman would be in so much pain from the weight.
Fantasy yes but taking it to ridiculous proportions kills any story.
I didn't read this story, I was just going through the new submissions and your comment was highlighted for whatever reason however I can tell you from my own personal experience 36H breasts do in fact exist.
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Anonymous11/09/15
Wrong category
This category is for wives who have sex with men other than their husbands. Put it in "erotic couplings" instead.
You asked for feedback and I wanted to let you know that I enjoyed your story. You did a good job with the technical aspects of writing the story, had good pacing and provided some interesting dialogue.
I encourage you to keep writing and to try a longer story with more opportunity for plot and character development.
I think posting the story in this category is fine. There are no rules for which category to use, and most stories could fit several. Great first effort!
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Anonymous11/09/15
The true solution
A Marriage Strife hub can solve the problem and every story where the husbands do not like their wives have extramarital affairs (from BTB to TLW) could get true place.
The creampieaters could get a wife's sharing hub too.................
I gave it a 4. All the while I was reading this story I got the feeling that she was texting her boyfriend, showing him what she will do to his cock by demonstrating on yours.
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A night in the life of married couple in love...
A night in the life of married couple in love...3*
Nice story - lucky man
Be grateful for what you got. My wife is 36A (nice legs, shame about the tits). In bed she waits for her divorced sister to phone some nights, and gives me a blowjob while she's listening. That's her revenge for her sister having bigger boobs.
An editor would have helped
Then drop the "true story" garbage. You're on a porn site on the world wide web. True or not, no one believes a word coming out of your mouth and the "true" tag does nothing for the storyline besides make us laugh. The story itself was mediocre. Nothing clever or original and the sex was ho hum. Not too bad for a first effort, but nothing really entertaining.
Sorry
But as soon as you hit the 36H I called bullshit. A 36h {if it even exists} is past the recommended breast reduction size {36f} and the woman would be in so much pain from the weight.
Fantasy yes but taking it to ridiculous proportions kills any story.
@ gordo
I didn't read this story, I was just going through the new submissions and your comment was highlighted for whatever reason however I can tell you from my own personal experience 36H breasts do in fact exist.
Wrong category
This category is for wives who have sex with men other than their husbands. Put it in "erotic couplings" instead.
Great first story
You asked for feedback and I wanted to let you know that I enjoyed your story. You did a good job with the technical aspects of writing the story, had good pacing and provided some interesting dialogue.
I encourage you to keep writing and to try a longer story with more opportunity for plot and character development.
I think posting the story in this category is fine. There are no rules for which category to use, and most stories could fit several. Great first effort!
The true solution
A Marriage Strife hub can solve the problem and every story where the husbands do not like their wives have extramarital affairs (from BTB to TLW) could get true place.
The creampieaters could get a wife's sharing hub too.................
Makes a good read. The writing is good.
I gave it a 4. All the while I was reading this story I got the feeling that she was texting her boyfriend, showing him what she will do to his cock by demonstrating on yours.
your toes are in the water
good intro. focus on a plot and a little more heat. looking forward to more, and i like your conversational prose style.
Nice one
That's a wife I would not mind having
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