excellent reading and wonderful storyline.... I know the joys of anal and the story was written well. Full of real life expressions and feelings. Keep up the great work.. Jane
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Anonymous01/11/04
Cheryl
Cheryl is a sadistic anal bitch that is taking advantage of her husband. We hope he gets his revenge.
Laura & Lisa, bi sisters, NO VOTE
Don't try to get fancy with your descriptions. Using terms like, "cuntal opening" and "lingual member" instead of just "opening" (you were eating her pussy. what other opening was there unless you said "asshole"?), and "tongue", distract from the story and are like speed bumps.
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Anonymous01/16/04
Great story
Although Im not gay, this one shows how
incredibly thrilling it can be to be
totally helpless.
And this loving domination!
Wish it had been three women!
Please go on that way!
by
Anonymous03/04/04
mmmmm
that was so hot im still horny! omg! beautiful writing and imagery! wow!
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Anonymous09/20/04
has potential
this is a great story, but you need to make your choices more erotic than scientific. . .words like "lingual" stop the flow of the story and completely kill the mood you've tried so hard to build. More desciption of sensations and less of these plot-halting words please.
This was pretty hot and well-written. I think the wife should not have arranged to have hubby fucked bareback -- not unless she is trying to get him HIV positive, that is. I know it's just a story but people sometimes imitate stories and we know gay escorts who have sex with lots of other partners are at high risk to be HIV positive. I assume that's what the two men were, unless they just happened to be the wife's friends -- we don't know. I think in this domination scene, wife should have made hubby continue to do her (to keep his mouth busy) while he was getting fucked, not stop the cunnilingus after getting herself partway there. In addition to a snowball, we need to see him clean a creampie out of his wife -- it's the next, natural step in his training . . .
English
wow!
excellent reading and wonderful storyline.... I know the joys of anal and the story was written well. Full of real life expressions and feelings. Keep up the great work.. Jane
Cheryl
Cheryl is a sadistic anal bitch that is taking advantage of her husband. We hope he gets his revenge.
Laura & Lisa, bi sisters, NO VOTE
Needs work
Don't try to get fancy with your descriptions. Using terms like, "cuntal opening" and "lingual member" instead of just "opening" (you were eating her pussy. what other opening was there unless you said "asshole"?), and "tongue", distract from the story and are like speed bumps.
Great story
Although Im not gay, this one shows how
incredibly thrilling it can be to be
totally helpless.
And this loving domination!
Wish it had been three women!
Please go on that way!
mmmmm
that was so hot im still horny! omg! beautiful writing and imagery! wow!
has potential
this is a great story, but you need to make your choices more erotic than scientific. . .words like "lingual" stop the flow of the story and completely kill the mood you've tried so hard to build. More desciption of sensations and less of these plot-halting words please.
Lucky that STD's don't occur in stories.
This was pretty hot and well-written. I think the wife should not have arranged to have hubby fucked bareback -- not unless she is trying to get him HIV positive, that is. I know it's just a story but people sometimes imitate stories and we know gay escorts who have sex with lots of other partners are at high risk to be HIV positive. I assume that's what the two men were, unless they just happened to be the wife's friends -- we don't know. I think in this domination scene, wife should have made hubby continue to do her (to keep his mouth busy) while he was getting fucked, not stop the cunnilingus after getting herself partway there. In addition to a snowball, we need to see him clean a creampie out of his wife -- it's the next, natural step in his training . . .
great
what a great fantsay
hot !
such a hot story :)
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