Very well done. I have a soft spot in my heart for Asian women (and a hard spot elsewhere) and I could easily identify with the characters. A couple of points that could have made it better:
1. What kind of wife leaves her husband alone for two weeks with a Chinese doll? Knowing of my attraction to Asian women, my wife won't even let me get a pedicure without her tagging along.
2. I don't particularly care for other people re-writing my stories but it might have been more fun to let the husband continue to worry about Birdie finding out about his indiscretion with Lan until he comes home from work one day to find Birdie's head between Lan's legs in bed.
3. Spelling and grammar. An editor could have cleaned this up and made a big improvement in the final product. Use one next time.
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Anonymous11/10/15
sequels please
Loved the story. Can't wait to read more (if possible)!
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Anonymous11/11/15
when is the next chapter coming??
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Anonymous11/12/15
Racism isn't sexy. Deserves
JFC this was some orientalist trash. If I and every random woman you saw around had some fantasy about white men being Money slaves for (insert non white ethnicity) women because they looove to serve us, and no one ever shut down any of those women spouting that nonsense (plus events in history where a large number of this ethnicity of women raped / made slaves out of white men after imprisoning them), that would be almost as fucked up as this disrespectful and inaccurate fictional representation of Asian women. The commonness of how white and other people hold this weird generalizing script in their heads about Asian women makes it even more despicable. Have some common decency and treat other people like they're humans and not like some made up fantasy. If you ever gotten to know regular Asian women you would understand how unintelligent, racist, and rapist-y you sound. This is the shit that makes Asian women hate you and not want to fuck you. Keep it to yourself.
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Anonymous11/13/15
Re: Anonymous
In the words on Ben Affleck.... "fick-shun-ul kar-eck-turz." Sheesh, it's an erotica fantasy story, not a doctoral thesis on Causation guilt.
Awesome story I sure hope there is a chapter 2. Great work!!!!
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Anonymous11/25/15
Chinese
Nice story, pretty long, but I think I'm in love with Lan.
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Anonymous05/14/16
Anonymous & Racism isn't sexy? What? Are you for frigging real?
Come on Anonymous, get off your high horse and cut the racism comment crap. There's enough of that PC shit everywhere else. This is Literotica, not the frigging Huffington Post. This is erotic fantasy, not the real world. Guys get off on us asian girls. Live with it. Enjoy it for fuck's sake. I do and I'm both asian and female. Or fuck off. Whichever. Personally, if I was the author of this I'd delete your comment as a complete waste of the space time continuum. As it is, I've just wasted 30 seconds of my life reading your shit and rather more ranting in response.
English
Nice expression of the Asian fantasy
Very well done. I have a soft spot in my heart for Asian women (and a hard spot elsewhere) and I could easily identify with the characters. A couple of points that could have made it better:
1. What kind of wife leaves her husband alone for two weeks with a Chinese doll? Knowing of my attraction to Asian women, my wife won't even let me get a pedicure without her tagging along.
2. I don't particularly care for other people re-writing my stories but it might have been more fun to let the husband continue to worry about Birdie finding out about his indiscretion with Lan until he comes home from work one day to find Birdie's head between Lan's legs in bed.
3. Spelling and grammar. An editor could have cleaned this up and made a big improvement in the final product. Use one next time.
sequels please
Loved the story. Can't wait to read more (if possible)!
when is the next chapter coming??
Racism isn't sexy. Deserves
JFC this was some orientalist trash. If I and every random woman you saw around had some fantasy about white men being Money slaves for (insert non white ethnicity) women because they looove to serve us, and no one ever shut down any of those women spouting that nonsense (plus events in history where a large number of this ethnicity of women raped / made slaves out of white men after imprisoning them), that would be almost as fucked up as this disrespectful and inaccurate fictional representation of Asian women. The commonness of how white and other people hold this weird generalizing script in their heads about Asian women makes it even more despicable. Have some common decency and treat other people like they're humans and not like some made up fantasy. If you ever gotten to know regular Asian women you would understand how unintelligent, racist, and rapist-y you sound. This is the shit that makes Asian women hate you and not want to fuck you. Keep it to yourself.
Re: Anonymous
In the words on Ben Affleck.... "fick-shun-ul kar-eck-turz." Sheesh, it's an erotica fantasy story, not a doctoral thesis on Causation guilt.
WOW!!!
Awesome story I sure hope there is a chapter 2. Great work!!!!
Chinese
Nice story, pretty long, but I think I'm in love with Lan.
Anonymous & Racism isn't sexy? What? Are you for frigging real?
Come on Anonymous, get off your high horse and cut the racism comment crap. There's enough of that PC shit everywhere else. This is Literotica, not the frigging Huffington Post. This is erotic fantasy, not the real world. Guys get off on us asian girls. Live with it. Enjoy it for fuck's sake. I do and I'm both asian and female. Or fuck off. Whichever. Personally, if I was the author of this I'd delete your comment as a complete waste of the space time continuum. As it is, I've just wasted 30 seconds of my life reading your shit and rather more ranting in response.
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