Anime Convention Harem Ch. 05

It's Sad

But Chloe is not a characture but a real person...I think I am related to like 3 of them.

what's wrong with you?!

i would have rated this chapter 0 if it was possible.

Re: what's wrong with you?!

Well, a 1-star will bring the individual chapter's ranking down, I'd suggest you do that if it adequately sums up your feelings.

I've gotten a lot of flak for posting this chapter before because of the way it purportedly represents feminism and gender politics, so I'll say it clearly.

This chapter's purpose was to introduce three major characters, one of whom, Chloe, serves as the series antagonist. EVERYTHING about her is written to make her despicable. She represents a misandrist hate-movement that fashion themselves as feminists - I don't want you to think I'm trying to construe all feminists as man-hating extremists, because they're not. Feminists on a whole are doing GOOD things in society - but this story isn't about them.

If I wrote a story where the villain was a violent, brutal terrorist who espoused Islam - that doesn't mean Muslims are villains, or terrorists, because they're not. Villains are simply always more, well, HATE-able when they're dirtying an actual just cause by claiming to be a part of it.

short

The last chapter ended with a connection request and this one did not tell that story. I am wanting the stories to connect.

Re: short

Stephanie's side of the story is continuing in chapter six, which is submitted and pending approval now.

Great work

Love how you are building a story, not just have sex out of the blue. Keep it up, and let the haters fall.

I have read your work be for I a glad you r finishing it

More

Thank You for your writing. Please Continue to do the great writing You have been.

Screw The Haters

This writing is awesome. Enjoying the buildup and your style. Can't wait for things to get spicy!

loving this story!

Please keep it up. It has massive potential. Enjoying the slow build.

Dang!

That is some seriously snappy dialogue. Well done on a great chapter!

asianToy

damn....

Seriously damn, I've met some psycho crazy feminists in my day including my own late sister but that bitch makes them all seem like Mary fucking Poppins. If Chloe is even remotely based off anyone you actually know you have my deepest sympathies for having to put up with that level of self righteous self pitying BS.

Also just to make it clear I'm not saying women don't have a hard time of it, exceptionally hard in some countries, but personally knowing two innocent guys who have been found guilty of domestic violence I can honestly say it's not as much of a man's world anymore as you might think. The first even the judge agreed was innocent but had to sentence him to anger management out of his own pocket anyway because of how the law is written, in fact the woman he was supposed to have abused injured herself while technically assaulting him, and the other had mountains of evidence she was a crazy lying bitch but the female judge and prosecutor railroaded him into a conviction anyway.

Sounds familiar

I also hope that chloe isn't based on a person from your immediate circle of friends cause she's a real bitch. I had a roommate like that once and believe me, it was hell. If her boyfriend bought her flowers he was cheap. If he bought her jewelry he was trying to buy her. If he went out with her he wanted to show of his catch, if he stayed at home with her he was jealous. Needless to say she never had boyfriends for a long time.

It was the same with me and the rest of our roommates. If we showed skin we were degrading ourselves. If we didn't we were hiding so men wouldn't have to show some restraint.

In the end we just did everything we could to get her too move. Like dress really slutty or watch gangbang porn. Stuff like that.

5 chapters of build up

This shouldnt be on this site, you have a good writing style, developed well but this is the wrong site for this story.
Chapters are too short, 5 chapters in amd we have had 2 kisses, I personally think you amd your MC friends should go Back to that site and not bother posting or at least post under non erotica tags

Good writing, wrong place, especially this "chapter". You come off as very bitter in this one.

This is a good series for the most part. Your chapters are too short though, with the action in each chapter. You should combine multiple chapters together to be one submission,. I am hoping that Chloe gets an old fashioned beating to adjust her attitude.

RE: 5 chapters of build up

I personally think the author should do whatever the fuck he wants and let Lit mods tell him what should and should not be on this site. Maybe you are one and just forgot to log in?

One thing you did get right though, the chapters are short. Though that does sort of water down your complaint about the length of the build up.....hmmm