... a good continuation or not, it is not consistent with the original story. Yes we were forewarned that this was a fictional redux so we must accept the story for what it is: fiction.
javmor79's story was grounded and based upon real events while this yarn forays shamelessly into sensational territory. I think javmor79 would find the saliva retrieval mission and the blackmail revenge fuck angle highly implausible because I know he's a stickler for realism (read his other stories).
Be that as it may, I congratulate imhapless for writing a continuation and hope the trend continues with others trying their hand until javmor79 posts his own ending (the tease!).
Gotta admit, I first clicked on this having misread your name and fully prepared to read this and tear it apart. I thought you were "imstillfun", cuck writer extraordinaire. I normally avoid his works like the plague, but the thought of him trying to put a cuck spin on a story like that one was too irritating to ignore. I just had to see what retarded plot devices and bullshit justifications/rationalizations he would use to have Greg go from furious to ecstatic about wearing those horns.
It's not often I'm so happy about being wrong.
5 stars from me. I had fun reading it, and that's what I come here for. Now all I need is for someone to take up the challenge on the other end of the spectrum, diving deeper into the core problem(s) in the marriage and exploring the possibility of working things out...As long as they don't take the DQS1 approach and have Greg irrationally, illogically and stupidly shoulder all of the responsibility and blame himself for what happened.
When a cuck makes another man a cuck by fucking his wife, does it make for a good continuation of an original tale? Even though the whore left her husband it didn't matter. And the husband stays with his cheating wife? I'll just forget I read this.
The revenge was good until the end ruined it...How could this man do the same thing his wife has done in the end? With this end we are lead to suppose his wife was right when she cheated him...The 4 months weren't cheating, just a payback...His wife knew about it...After that it began to be cheating, as bad as his wife did...Cheating is always damnable!!! This could have been a 4* revenge story, but the final made it lower to 2*
I have read this line before and it kill's me, "Even if she was a cheating bitch, she was a good and concerned mother". No fucking way! A cheating bitch, cheats on her kids as well as her husband. She jeopardizes their future all for the sake of an orgasm or ego! That is the definition of a bad mother or father.
On another note, what was Susie thinking while her friend was fucking her husband? No comment there?
The things I loved were the integration of the new characters, i.e. Gail, Rudy, Mom, Dad, etc. I also loved the relationship with the kids. Great touches.
Explaining of him watching porn was realistic. We all have watched porn from time to time. Some more than others. If we didn't watch porn, we probably wouldn't have found this site in the first place. "He who has never sinned..." Blah, Blah, Blah. When Alicia said that he watched porn everyday, she could have been exaggerating the facts. We all say things in anger that isn't completely true. Also, we have a tendancy to see things that bother us as larger problems than they are. So the fact that his porn use was just as much as any other guy's is very plausible.
Of course the revenge was one I would have avoided, but it isn't my take on the story. Imhapless made this sequel his, which is what any good author would do.
My only quibble is the fact that you had him play football in high school when I had him playing baseball. Even this can be explained away. Many athletes play multiple sports. For instance, my best friend played Varsity basketball and football, though in football he was MY second string (we are very competitive, so that was important for me to say).
It was entertaining for me to see a different take than what I would have done. Nice Job!
What made the original stand out was that it was so much closer to the way people behave in real life than the over-used LW tripes of "weeping idiot woman," "guy who is owed a million favors," and "stupid cops who don't put two and two together."
All this did was turn an abnormally gripping drama into a brutally normal yank through the usual bitter fantasyland.
but as the Unoriginalist posted before me what made the original so compelling was that its supposedly a true story. Obviously if it is true like Javmor says then we dont know how it turned out but this was just a little too fantastical for me
First the wife in this one didn't exactly mesh with the original. The original didn't even mesh with herself in that story. She made comments to her husband about getting his panties in a wad, then smirked when he called her on it and the comment she made about his porn and "daring" him to hit her by getting in his face didn't mesh well with the reconciliation in this story. That being said I think both of the parts of this story were well written and were pretty consistent with each other. I even like how the original author commented on this ending to his tome by complimenting the writing in this part. I was afraid originally that we were going to get an RAAC ending from the original author but he left it hanging, just like real life, and left it up to imhapless to work his magic. Imhapless you do very nice work in your stories and they flow easily, just like this one did. Your characterization is usually spot on and your dialogues flow well. Thank you for sharing your story with us.
Admit that fooling the law is a dangerous thing, but I personally think remarks about someone else's wife should be adequate reason for throwing a big punch. Sorry I do not see how he reconciled with his wife and certainly would not want Susie.
..... He did not kidnap the kids. At the time they had joint custody. She knew the kids were with the grandparents and they were. She just didn't know where the grandparents were. The grandparents did not lie as they didn't speak to her. Apparently she never contacted her sister in law so they didn't lie either. If you think cops on occasion play fast and loose for the greater good you are deceiving yourself. While there may not be a false arrest claim there were other claims that could be made. anyway in the literary jurisdiction of the story they could bring such an action. The wife had no standing to do anything. The subsequent cheating did ruin the story
Thought it was entertaining, and meshed well with the original. Not perfect, but very good. I agree the Alicia character seems a bit more contrite than at the party, but her ongoing communication with both Susie and Dominic immediately after the party would have been problematic for me.
Agree the gaming of the assault charge and planting evidence was a bit much, maybe not if he murdered Dominic, but for an assault that would certainly be pleaded to misdemeanor battery, eh.
And for all those bitching about the Greg fucking Susie, it's called "equity", it balances the scales for him, and allows him to move on. Kind of common trait in human nature. eye for an eye type biblical stuff-look it up.
Good enough that I can forgive people avoiding Sweetie like a dental problem! 'Plaque' is a real problem to avoid, but not socializing with cheating cunts does NOT keep your teeth incrustation-free! Honest!
Great imagination to come up with a fairly elaborate continuation in such a short time. My main quibble is that there was not enough 'Sweetie Change' presented to make a reconciliation plausible! Five stars, nonetheless!
But the unoriginalist, one of the most logical commenters you'll ever find, hit the nail on the head. The notion that Javmor planted in our heads was that it was a true story. He sold that idea to us, and that sale made the story a success. The reason he was able to sell it was that he kept it real and he kept it short. Once we start getting more information and learn how the couple move on from that point, it may well become harder to accept. We believe the first story because we learned so little and it seemed plausible. It will be interesting to see if anyone, including Javmor, can continue this and keep it real. It won't be easy. This story clearly is not the continuation of the first Catwoman story.
I'm not normally in to violence. If anything I'm Susie. Husband is a sweetheart that is ok with sharing me. Love this conclusion. Great job. xoxoxoxoxAnnette
The Unoriginalist and HDK are right. The characters in the original would not behave like this. We need javmor79 to apply his considerable talents to the construction of a plausible outcome. I think Alicia still loves Greg but sleeping with old doofus will take some explaining.
Not badly written,far from it,but he turned into as big a scumbag as dominic. Alicia in this story doesn't make sense, she turns from being a selfish bitch into a doormat.Of Alicia really wanted back with him she wouldn't have agreed to the deal and if she was a selfish bitch she would have not cared about Dominick and Susie at all,so wouldn't have agreed.We also never learn why Susie put up with the Guido in the first place,and how she could be friends with Alicia after she fucked dumbbell?
I don't want to use Imhapless' story as a shameless plug, but I am working on a sequel. I still welcome other authors to show us their vision as far as how things play out.
Congrats on a very good story. I loved the revenge planning. Four stars out of five.
You picked up a very intriguing story and ran with and produced an ending fast. You deserve a lot of praise for that.
I liked the twist of dropping the lawsuit for the sex. I would have liked to have seen the cheating wife suffer a bit more by seeing the scene where she has to be in the house when her husband has sex. I liked the dialogue.
Okay, constructive criticism time. The reconciliation was very abrupt. I normally like a believeable reconciliation. But he was so dead set on revenge and divorce I had trouble with the change. I know the story is not supposed to be an epic tale. But i think I needed to see one conversation between husband and wife that leads to the reconciliation.
Also, and I am not piling on, I would have liked a clearer explanation from Alicia on why she cheated.
Having said all that I enjoyed this story very much. Thanks.Steve
P.S. Don't be mad but i am looking forward to Javmor's version too.
Trying To Please Two Women Is Like A Ball And Chain
There is a reason why most societies allow only one wife.
Neat story that ties up the conflict. I can understand reconciliation. I can understand screwing the other guy's wife. But no one shares the love of a spouse without some anguish.
English
nice
good continuation
Whether it is ...
... a good continuation or not, it is not consistent with the original story. Yes we were forewarned that this was a fictional redux so we must accept the story for what it is: fiction.
javmor79's story was grounded and based upon real events while this yarn forays shamelessly into sensational territory. I think javmor79 would find the saliva retrieval mission and the blackmail revenge fuck angle highly implausible because I know he's a stickler for realism (read his other stories).
Be that as it may, I congratulate imhapless for writing a continuation and hope the trend continues with others trying their hand until javmor79 posts his own ending (the tease!).
Well okay then!
Gotta admit, I first clicked on this having misread your name and fully prepared to read this and tear it apart. I thought you were "imstillfun", cuck writer extraordinaire. I normally avoid his works like the plague, but the thought of him trying to put a cuck spin on a story like that one was too irritating to ignore. I just had to see what retarded plot devices and bullshit justifications/rationalizations he would use to have Greg go from furious to ecstatic about wearing those horns.
It's not often I'm so happy about being wrong.
5 stars from me. I had fun reading it, and that's what I come here for. Now all I need is for someone to take up the challenge on the other end of the spectrum, diving deeper into the core problem(s) in the marriage and exploring the possibility of working things out...As long as they don't take the DQS1 approach and have Greg irrationally, illogically and stupidly shoulder all of the responsibility and blame himself for what happened.
Well...
When a cuck makes another man a cuck by fucking his wife, does it make for a good continuation of an original tale? Even though the whore left her husband it didn't matter. And the husband stays with his cheating wife? I'll just forget I read this.
no rating
The revenge was good until the end ruined it...
The revenge was good until the end ruined it...How could this man do the same thing his wife has done in the end? With this end we are lead to suppose his wife was right when she cheated him...The 4 months weren't cheating, just a payback...His wife knew about it...After that it began to be cheating, as bad as his wife did...Cheating is always damnable!!! This could have been a 4* revenge story, but the final made it lower to 2*
WTF?
I have read this line before and it kill's me, "Even if she was a cheating bitch, she was a good and concerned mother". No fucking way! A cheating bitch, cheats on her kids as well as her husband. She jeopardizes their future all for the sake of an orgasm or ego! That is the definition of a bad mother or father.
On another note, what was Susie thinking while her friend was fucking her husband? No comment there?
Not Bad, But...
I don't believe that he is right to be carrying on the affair with Susie.
That takes him away from the moral high ground he had after the Halloween party.
Liked it.
The things I loved were the integration of the new characters, i.e. Gail, Rudy, Mom, Dad, etc. I also loved the relationship with the kids. Great touches.
Explaining of him watching porn was realistic. We all have watched porn from time to time. Some more than others. If we didn't watch porn, we probably wouldn't have found this site in the first place. "He who has never sinned..." Blah, Blah, Blah. When Alicia said that he watched porn everyday, she could have been exaggerating the facts. We all say things in anger that isn't completely true. Also, we have a tendancy to see things that bother us as larger problems than they are. So the fact that his porn use was just as much as any other guy's is very plausible.
Of course the revenge was one I would have avoided, but it isn't my take on the story. Imhapless made this sequel his, which is what any good author would do.
My only quibble is the fact that you had him play football in high school when I had him playing baseball. Even this can be explained away. Many athletes play multiple sports. For instance, my best friend played Varsity basketball and football, though in football he was MY second string (we are very competitive, so that was important for me to say).
It was entertaining for me to see a different take than what I would have done. Nice Job!
Man
What made the original stand out was that it was so much closer to the way people behave in real life than the over-used LW tripes of "weeping idiot woman," "guy who is owed a million favors," and "stupid cops who don't put two and two together."
All this did was turn an abnormally gripping drama into a brutally normal yank through the usual bitter fantasyland.
NOT bad
but as the Unoriginalist posted before me what made the original so compelling was that its supposedly a true story. Obviously if it is true like Javmor says then we dont know how it turned out but this was just a little too fantastical for me
Only a couple of comments on this ending.
First the wife in this one didn't exactly mesh with the original. The original didn't even mesh with herself in that story. She made comments to her husband about getting his panties in a wad, then smirked when he called her on it and the comment she made about his porn and "daring" him to hit her by getting in his face didn't mesh well with the reconciliation in this story. That being said I think both of the parts of this story were well written and were pretty consistent with each other. I even like how the original author commented on this ending to his tome by complimenting the writing in this part. I was afraid originally that we were going to get an RAAC ending from the original author but he left it hanging, just like real life, and left it up to imhapless to work his magic. Imhapless you do very nice work in your stories and they flow easily, just like this one did. Your characterization is usually spot on and your dialogues flow well. Thank you for sharing your story with us.
Fun Read
Admit that fooling the law is a dangerous thing, but I personally think remarks about someone else's wife should be adequate reason for throwing a big punch. Sorry I do not see how he reconciled with his wife and certainly would not want Susie.
You ruin a good BTB story
When you take away the moral high ground. You're a talented writer, but apparently you have the morals of an alley cat.
overthefalls you are incorrect....
..... He did not kidnap the kids. At the time they had joint custody. She knew the kids were with the grandparents and they were. She just didn't know where the grandparents were. The grandparents did not lie as they didn't speak to her. Apparently she never contacted her sister in law so they didn't lie either. If you think cops on occasion play fast and loose for the greater good you are deceiving yourself. While there may not be a false arrest claim there were other claims that could be made. anyway in the literary jurisdiction of the story they could bring such an action. The wife had no standing to do anything. The subsequent cheating did ruin the story
I liked it
Thought it was entertaining, and meshed well with the original. Not perfect, but very good. I agree the Alicia character seems a bit more contrite than at the party, but her ongoing communication with both Susie and Dominic immediately after the party would have been problematic for me.
Agree the gaming of the assault charge and planting evidence was a bit much, maybe not if he murdered Dominic, but for an assault that would certainly be pleaded to misdemeanor battery, eh.
And for all those bitching about the Greg fucking Susie, it's called "equity", it balances the scales for him, and allows him to move on. Kind of common trait in human nature. eye for an eye type biblical stuff-look it up.
Good quick response
Good enough that I can forgive people avoiding Sweetie like a dental problem! 'Plaque' is a real problem to avoid, but not socializing with cheating cunts does NOT keep your teeth incrustation-free! Honest!
Great imagination to come up with a fairly elaborate continuation in such a short time. My main quibble is that there was not enough 'Sweetie Change' presented to make a reconciliation plausible! Five stars, nonetheless!
I appreciate the effort.
But the unoriginalist, one of the most logical commenters you'll ever find, hit the nail on the head. The notion that Javmor planted in our heads was that it was a true story. He sold that idea to us, and that sale made the story a success. The reason he was able to sell it was that he kept it real and he kept it short. Once we start getting more information and learn how the couple move on from that point, it may well become harder to accept. We believe the first story because we learned so little and it seemed plausible. It will be interesting to see if anyone, including Javmor, can continue this and keep it real. It won't be easy. This story clearly is not the continuation of the first Catwoman story.
Like it
I'm not normally in to violence. If anything I'm Susie. Husband is a sweetheart that is ok with sharing me. Love this conclusion. Great job. xoxoxoxoxAnnette
No Way
The Unoriginalist and HDK are right. The characters in the original would not behave like this. We need javmor79 to apply his considerable talents to the construction of a plausible outcome. I think Alicia still loves Greg but sleeping with old doofus will take some explaining.
Yuck
Not badly written,far from it,but he turned into as big a scumbag as dominic. Alicia in this story doesn't make sense, she turns from being a selfish bitch into a doormat.Of Alicia really wanted back with him she wouldn't have agreed to the deal and if she was a selfish bitch she would have not cared about Dominick and Susie at all,so wouldn't have agreed.We also never learn why Susie put up with the Guido in the first place,and how she could be friends with Alicia after she fucked dumbbell?
To all
I don't want to use Imhapless' story as a shameless plug, but I am working on a sequel. I still welcome other authors to show us their vision as far as how things play out.
You guys are awesome! Thanks.
Glad to hear the original author is working on a sequel.
Thanks for the effort.
I loved the revenge planning but ...
Congrats on a very good story. I loved the revenge planning. Four stars out of five.
You picked up a very intriguing story and ran with and produced an ending fast. You deserve a lot of praise for that.
I liked the twist of dropping the lawsuit for the sex. I would have liked to have seen the cheating wife suffer a bit more by seeing the scene where she has to be in the house when her husband has sex. I liked the dialogue.
Okay, constructive criticism time. The reconciliation was very abrupt. I normally like a believeable reconciliation. But he was so dead set on revenge and divorce I had trouble with the change. I know the story is not supposed to be an epic tale. But i think I needed to see one conversation between husband and wife that leads to the reconciliation.
Also, and I am not piling on, I would have liked a clearer explanation from Alicia on why she cheated.
Having said all that I enjoyed this story very much. Thanks.Steve
P.S. Don't be mad but i am looking forward to Javmor's version too.
Trying To Please Two Women Is Like A Ball And Chain
There is a reason why most societies allow only one wife.
Neat story that ties up the conflict. I can understand reconciliation. I can understand screwing the other guy's wife. But no one shares the love of a spouse without some anguish.
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