Another great chapter. Don't make us wait so long for the next one
by
Anonymous11/29/15
A bit confused
"Mel had spent an entire weekend cramming me full of peanut butter icecream and watching rom-com's with me, cuddling on the couch in our pj's. On the third day she took me surfing, forcing me to stay out on the water until I caught a perfect wave all the way to shore. She knew instinctively what I had needed, more than my guy friends could have ever helped with. I had loved her the most out of my entire family."
It seems like that they were together in person, where as they have been together online. I only got confused at this paragraph. Not sure if this slipped in from a future chapter or not, but the series is great! Excited that this was released, and hopefully won't wait as long for the next two chapters. Great work!
by
Anonymous11/29/15
Secretary
I liked the beginning of this story but you lost me when you involved the secretary.
He was talking about the past. Specifically, when he was in highschool and was dumped by his girlfriend. His cousin consoled him. If you had reread the preceding paragraph, you'd have figured it out.
I feel sorry for Bella , clearly she loves her boss and would do anything for him. It would be a fitting end if Mel came to Australia lived with Stephan and the three of them moved in together. No one looses out. Can't wait to see which way you end this story . Whichever way you go I'm sure I won't be disappointed. Another 5 star effort
English
Great
Another great chapter. Don't make us wait so long for the next one
A bit confused
"Mel had spent an entire weekend cramming me full of peanut butter icecream and watching rom-com's with me, cuddling on the couch in our pj's. On the third day she took me surfing, forcing me to stay out on the water until I caught a perfect wave all the way to shore. She knew instinctively what I had needed, more than my guy friends could have ever helped with. I had loved her the most out of my entire family."
It seems like that they were together in person, where as they have been together online. I only got confused at this paragraph. Not sure if this slipped in from a future chapter or not, but the series is great! Excited that this was released, and hopefully won't wait as long for the next two chapters. Great work!
Secretary
I liked the beginning of this story but you lost me when you involved the secretary.
Great stuff
Can't wait for the conclusion.
@ a bit confused.
He was talking about the past. Specifically, when he was in highschool and was dumped by his girlfriend. His cousin consoled him. If you had reread the preceding paragraph, you'd have figured it out.
Great story as usual.
I feel sorry for Bella , clearly she loves her boss and would do anything for him. It would be a fitting end if Mel came to Australia lived with Stephan and the three of them moved in together. No one looses out. Can't wait to see which way you end this story . Whichever way you go I'm sure I won't be disappointed. Another 5 star effort
Incoming...
The next chapter is on it's way. "Soon" is sooner than you think this time.
The story is very good
But your choice of character names is terrible. Bella, Mel, Della, Ella, Stella, Fella, Jello, Cello, Hella, Excella.
So confusing.
keep'em cummin'
I'm looking forward too there meeting, hopefully in the flesh, bumping and a thumpin'
It's getting better and better
Fianlly! I was missing FootsieTooToes, haha.
I love both Mel and Bella. Great how you develop the story.
Click here to leave your own comment on this submission! or
Back to Technically We're Estranged Ch. 05 or
More submissions by BreakTheBar.