All Comments on 'Club Pericol Ch. 03'

An unusual lack of comments and relatively low score for a fairly well written and fairly realistic scenario. I hope we do not just go from one capture to another, but focus on the girls already captured and what develops. 7 years seems a bit long, but I will follow it for 7 months, at least.

I have to agree with Jleetechie - this should move on to the brothel, as each capture scenario will feel about the same now the rules are established. It's a decent prologue, but it's hard to see where this could go as a full series if it remains at the club

Having used up all his original material in the early part of the story, the writer reverted to adding another victim and repeating the previous encounter. It seems unlikely that this will go any further unless the guy manages to borrow something original from somewhere else.