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The Circle Ch. 01

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by Anonymous

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by arrowglass11/22/15

Great approach to a new story!

Really want to see where you go with this one...HOT already!!!

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by joaodasdesgracas12/09/15

Pretentius and Unrealistic Writing

This oozes pretentiouness, so much. And who in bloody hell do you know that talk like that? Nor even Laureate Writers talk like that, and you also switched between PoVs and Persons (1 and 3rd) in the same scene. Oh, and the Circle idea is... Ridiculous. It oozes pseudo-science.

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