CH. 01 was about magical transformation of both our story's hero and his first conquest.
CH. 02 is about change through plastic surgery. It would have been better if Jillian was transformed through sex as well.
There's also a disconnect between 01 and 02, in that, in 01, our hero was becoming a chick magnet. In 02, he is just the first of Jillian's post-surgery conquests. She is the focus, instead of our hero. She isn't drawn to him in particular, she's just out for dick...any dick.
I'm off to read CH. 03 and hope it returns to the plot and magic of CH.01.
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really good you should continue w one or two more
Chapters 1&2 tell two different stories
CH. 01 was about magical transformation of both our story's hero and his first conquest.
CH. 02 is about change through plastic surgery. It would have been better if Jillian was transformed through sex as well.
There's also a disconnect between 01 and 02, in that, in 01, our hero was becoming a chick magnet. In 02, he is just the first of Jillian's post-surgery conquests. She is the focus, instead of our hero. She isn't drawn to him in particular, she's just out for dick...any dick.
I'm off to read CH. 03 and hope it returns to the plot and magic of CH.01.
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