Jen and Her Sister

What no one will ever know...

....is why you stopped the story there. That was hot!!

Please continue.

Please please please

Not bad

Decent… but you should have added another page which would have given you the opportunity to do justice to your intro tag line. Unless I missed something, there was no hot three-way. Nevertheless, you show promise…Keep writing! ***

okay start

That was an okay start to a story. First let me say if you make the chapters longer you will find people will vote higher. people don't like to be just getting into the characters and story line and then it ends. Before the comments start flying, yes i have an account and yes i write myself.

Really very good so far . Are you going to continue ? As we are all waiting to see what happens next .

Too short

Wat's taboo or incest? sisters going to go down on eachother?

thanks, everyone!

Author here.

Wanted to say thanks for the comments so far, and I am taking your advice to heart.

@Averygoodlay something like that, yes. :)

@adhd_steve and the Anon asking why I stopped there: Part 2 is coming very soon! I have been in the middle of switching jobs, so unusually busy. Sorry for the delay.

@ the "okay start" Anon: understood, and I tried to be aware of that as I was deciding where to end part one, because since *I* read here a lot, I feel that same frustration. Next time I will get into a little more before splitting parts.

Thanks again for the suggestions/comments/criticisms/advice!

oops

Forgot to address this one:

@RapidResponder understood. It's definitely coming in Part 2. Lots of coming. ;)

Well?

Come on, dammit. We're waiting... :)