My Cousin Jo and I Pt. 02

Great story

Great story so far hope you continue can't wait for the next chapter

Getting better, at least story wise, the grammatical and structural problems still persist!

Better

Better than chapter one. The story is progressing nicely, and the grammer errors were fewer, but still there.

AND

How old are the twins again?

Very HOT !! Please write the next chapter soon so we can finally see Jo give it to her cousin.......... great story line. Thank you !!

Good Read, But Inconsistant

Ok, I've really been enjoying the stories, but some things bother me. First, was is up with this family that thinks 18+ years old can be ordered around like little children? Second, what an 18 year old doing ordering 19 year olds around and making comments about their sex experience?

Editor still needed

...as the run-on sentences really distracted me on this installment.

That said, I do love how she teases him, although the twins grabbing him seems really out of place. Him putting suntan lotion on her is sensual, but he shouldn't cum just from her touching him once. Those two things seem really awkward.

Love how she's "leading him on" and it's convincing. Given the above distractions though, this is a 4.