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Wow
My God, that was intense. Please, hurry with chapter two!
Totally awesome story.
I look forward to the next chapter. Very unique story line.
Shouldn't you be off somewhere, writing us romance
novels? It was excellent! Continue...
Holy crap, that was good!
This is the first comment I've left, after years reading this site. This author is amazing! I would urge her to write more for us, but that would be like stealing. She really should get paid for what she does. Amazing story!
don't stop now!
Is this not the absolute best I have ever read?? It is the absolute best! I read over 20 romance novels a month (lot's of bucks!) and your style of writing is soooo
familiar! I bet you are one of those great avon romance writers...this story IS similar to a story I read this summer (MB). But who cares about that! Stop reading this and start writing the next part! I will be checking for the next part and your next story! Bad Girl23, I got your number and you are a writer extraodinaire! There ain't a thing bad about you! Thank you, thank you for one of the best story lines I have been captivated by in a long time.
Oh My!
That was amazing & so so sensual. Great style and vivid detail.
More please.
Read chapter two first and I......
had to rush back and find chapter one! These two chapters are amazing! Some of the best erotic romance I have ever read! Serioulsy addictive are these characters and all I can say is I wish you wrote for soaps as they need this kind of passion infused in them again. I would read anything you post after this and hope we see much more of the delightful story of James and Emma! I am in love with them already!
Unbelieveably Brilliant!
What can i say i've never been so captivated!
Please please write more on Emily and James! I would pay too read more by this author!
Congratulations on a fantastic storyline and charachters, well done!
Wow, it's steamy in here!
Very hot. Right up there with a good romance novel, but with hotter sex! Rare for an amateur writer to describe kissing quite so well. Good rhythm, almost always maintains a connection between the reader and the female character's sensations.
Every girl's dream
So many stories try to take things too far...this was perfect, like it was the sum of every girl's fantasies, put exactly as they feel...I'm in love!
If you like sappy romance...
you'll like this. But it's tame and certainly not a true "non-consent" story. Decent writing, boring storyline.
WOW!
Very erotic, very arrousing. Excellent story and I can't wait to read more of your work.
SIZZLING
Please don't stop writing. I've become addicted to your submissions.
10
i loved it. this is one of the best stories ever. thank god there are three more.
Better twin..
Oh James is definatly the better twin! I really love this story; it's well written and both characters are very interesting, two strong personalities, like that type of story. I read and read so I'm always saying this, but at this moment, this is my favorite story on Lit, grins. Thanks for the yummy read!
Whoa
I think this is my 10th time reading this
There is something about this story.....
.....that makes me re-read this story over and over and over again. Simple phrases yet so powerful, so erotic. This is the kind of story that evokes strong emotions. Leaving the reader immersed in the most steamy fantasy realm.
Gotta love it!
WOW
I dont know what to say, that was an amazing story. The best I have read so far, I dont know what it is about it but it is just brilliant! Safe to say it is stored in my favourites list! Thanks for an excellent and evocative read. x
Impressive work
Well done, the sex scenes were pretty hot as well. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Whoa.
Bloody amazing!!!
holy shit...
loved it!
OMG...
Ok I never comment of stories around here, but for this one I felt compelled to do so! I've already read this through about 3 or 4 times and just can't get enough of it! The characters are extremely well written making you totally believe in them and how they act, the scenes and perfectly executed and so very erotic... In short I loved everything about this story!!
Wonderful
This was too perfect for words...
2nd time
This is the 2nd time i'm reading this- I love this story. Although I think if it took place in maybe early 19th century, It would be more evocative and nostalgic than it is.
Wow!
How good is this?! I want a James too!
Wow!
I am properly impressed! Very well written, detailed and not childish. It has a perfect plot and a wonderful twist im only stopping to comment before i read the rest i am addicted, very good work.
I love this story!!!!!
This series is one of my favs of all time... so hot and so mmmmm well I want more!
YOU ARE ABSOLUTELY FREAKING AMAZING!!
Wow...Just...Wow. I am totally amazed. I never comment on stories here, NEVER. But with this one I just HAD to. I love this story SO MUCH!! And I just love the way they talk, it's sexy. Oh God I want a James too!! Haha.
Marvelous job. You're incredibly talented. Please keep it coming. I'm absolutely in love with this story.
automats, not humans
another story displaying mindless automats: put some cock inside and they work like clockwork. first doubt, then comes his approach, again doubts, but then comes his cock, no further doubts but instead orgasmic pleasure -- and that's just the coital part. the rest is equally formulaic and especially clichéd: some rich English with lots of money and sans souci that've fucked for lifetime, though only one part of knew it til today. of course, the twist is utterly implausible: deus ex machina. (apart from that her "reasoning" the moment James abducts is similarly implausible, for such a situation the affects what take over: there's no time and energy for complex considerations like architectural peculiarity of the building.)
furthermore the hackneyed romance, uhm, so-called background doesn't help this a bit. consider the following text passage:
"She knew that if she had married him, she would not have been able to love him for the rest of her life. It was that simple - she had been in love with him for a short time, perhaps, but she would not have been able to love him for life. If she were, she would still assuredly be in love with him, and she was not. No, she was most definitely not.
She consigned her love, and her hurt, to the past. It had happened. It was over. She was still alive. She would heal, completely, given time, and one day she would love again."
9 sentences and 6 times love (even 2 times in one sentence!): that's simply too much love to take if you know what i mean. and no, this is not only a question of variety but of substance: e.g. you repeat that Kit wasn't the love of her life and that she doesn't love him anymore over and over (not only) in this short passage. apart from that all the so-called background talk in the beginning is just that: talk. info dump, it's also called. does the reader really need to know all this full-blown superficial descriptions? for example, her brother's appearance serves only one purpose: to drop a description of your female protagonist. after that he's gone. and it's superficial because we don't really get know anything: just inflated talk about all but nothing in particular. we don't get to know any other guests, the party itself, nowhere your noble English lifestyle is shown to the reader: so why include such a lenghty exposition at all? the message that was important to you that she was left by her ex who married another woman instead and that your female protagonist doesn't love him anymore could've been introduced in the course of the story with much greater ease and style.
And the picture of her being left at the altar is symptomatic of the biggest problem of the story: clichés.
–AJ
One of my favourite stories
I rarely leave comments, but after seeing the incredibly rude (and far too long-winded) one that was left earlier, I wanted to say that this is one of my favourite stories on this site. Though I've read it many times now, it never loses its appeal.
who is this auden james a-hole?
if you didn't like the story, just say it! was it really necessary to write a 4 page letter? and besides, your judgement sucks, AJ! this is one of the best stories on this site! you rock, ms. girl!!!!
What the f**k, Auden James!
What are you doing on this website, then? These stories are to be enjoyed, not ground to dust!
xD
HAHA everyone against auden james ;D
i like this story so far =)
Loved it i came so hard 2 this story
i fuced myself so hard thinking it 2 james fucking me i squierted 2 your words loved it
great story
Thank you for sharing this. Lovely writing, and I hope you will contribute again!
wow
New to the erotic genre, but this is the best i've read. I'll need to regain my energy before reading more!
To auden james
Go fuck a rabbit, you asshole! This is a wonderful story and should be enjoyed.
Rape
Against her will. He forced her . The rest was BS.
wow, 300 favorites
and at lest one anon who doesn't understand what "NonConsent/Reluctance" means....
hmmm
forced sex and trickery not quite the turn on
:) LOL, the non-con section tends to have non-con stories in it :)
People seem to be unhappy about the non-con nature of the story :).
Are they being forced to trawl through the non-con section of this site, I wonder? :)
Hmm, what could we possibly find inside the non-con section..? Could it be..? Noooo..? Not non-con stories, surely..???!!!! Tell me it ain't so!! :)
Go and read the romantic ones, people. This isn't even heavy non-con, as she's more or less willing half the time. Jeeez.
Very fine writing.
A rare five stars from me. Thank you. Off to read the rest now.
Story
Great!
Liked it, but
what do i know?
When he bit her neck it was all over me.
Dear Lord
Thank you for sharing this! Unbelievably hot.
WTF
I came 3 times when I read this
awesome story
Well written and hot as hell but twins are not that easy to mistake 4 each other if you know them well
Beautiful
Wonderful twist! Can't wait for the next part!
WOW
Amazing Story and very well written. I hope James and her will find some love for eachother. 5 stars!
Nicely done
Needs work on the logic, but i adore your style. Good storytelling, hot love scenes. So far the sex scenes are love scenes and you are different in that from most of the rest on here. It is heavily emotional and it WORKS for me! Big grin
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