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Nature or Nurture Ch. 00-01

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by Anonymous01/19/16

Good story but editing badly needed.

Past tense,
Present tense.
Future tense,
Please learn how to write correctly.
It makes a very good story hard to read.
Writing future tense all the time like a script for a play is a bad habbit.
Think "she sat down" rather than "she sits down"
All in context of course.

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