A Bad Day

a second chapter please i love this story

Love It!!

Really love reading about stupid, dumb as a box of rocks women. 5 stars for a great flash story. Keep them coming!!!

NO FUSS---NO MUSS

no bother at all. TK U MLJ LV NV

yeah

how about a second chapter where that cunt marcy gets hers?

Short and...

oh so sweet.
A five.

Oh Yeah

How fucking stupid can you be? Short and sweet.

Five Stars

Badda-Bing

BAM!

I agree: short and to the point...

I agree: short and to the point...4*

Smart Move

Unlike all the stories filled with painful indecision, this one hit the sanity mark. The marriage was over, gratefully, she didn't let it go too far and have a plan to destroy him. She was a shitty wife, and would make a shittier mother. (Fortunately no kids were mentioned) The most important question a man can answer when faced with a problem is: What was my role in this problem and how can I correct it? In this case, he married a stupid slut. The correction for that is divorce!

Yes, just a silly flash story

Boring. Yes, just another silly unbelievable flash story that was pounding away in your head after reading the countless similar flash stories of brain-dead women.

Nice

Short and Sweet. A man standing up for himself and what is right. We need more stories like this one.

During the divorce and the discovery phase he'll probably find out she been screwing around on him for months.

Pizzanga! 3F's

Five stars, Favorite and Fan!

why

why does all the wives in these stories have an IQ that makes them retarded. your wife is a person, they are who they are. they dont wake up one mourning and lose 40 IQ points. so maybe dont marry somebody this stupid. just way to over the top.

Thanks for the offering.

The responsible thing to do

would be to quickly set up a meeting for the wife with a shrink. She is beyond crazy. He never noticed her insanity, and she never noticed that he wasn't the kind of guy to be a willing cuck? These two are a few cards short of a full deck.

A well told story.

He had warned her what would happen.

And put his warning into effect.

Very entertaining

and complete in itself.

Keep them coming please.

Friendship to possibly divorce

Several years ago I had some close friends, his wife went to visit her best friend from school. Both were married that night visiting was asked to participate in a three some and visiting declined and came home to husband that morning and filled him in. After that she never went to that town without husband. That is what wife in story doesn't understand. Your spouse is supposed to be your best friend lover and husband. She has lied and thought she wanted to cheat. She has gained some respect for husband now. She thought he was weak but sees he is strong. She may save marriage but it will cost some pride and life changes.

Not awful

Story wasn't bad but the editing sucked. Try a proof read next time.

I Know Just A Little Flash Story, But...

"But, Dave, I don't want a divorce! I love you, this was for us!” – How do (presumably) rational, at least semi-intelligent women, let themselves be convinced that it would be GOOD for their marriages to screw other men? And, of course they DON’T believe that it would ALSO be good for their husbands to screw other women!

Now, there’s nothing inherently wrong with an “open” marriage, as long as both parties agree, and although it isn’t MY cup of tea, even a cuckold arrangement is okay s long as the husband is a WILLING participant. But as soon as one party decides unilaterally to alter the monogamous nature of the marriage without consulting and/or discussing this with the partner, and decides to continue over the partner’s objections, they are in the wrong, and deserve whatever repercussions their partner feels they deserve.

I DO hope he has taken steps to make sure HE doesn't get fucked in the divorce like Marcy's husband!

*****

Old topic however the writing style made this a great read (over a cold one).
Thx!

Dreadful

Just wallow in your own depression and keep it to yourself.

Nothing erotic in it at all.

automatic 1*

for all the shit that fag bonnie/vastie rates.

Is this what passes for erotica?

Why do you BTB guys hate women so much? Did mommy drop you on your head one too many times? I'm 51 years old and have never ever met a woman like the stereotypical slots that guys love to trash.

Good flash story......

That was well written and had a good flow to it.

@Anon...

...WTF are you going on about? BTB? There was literally NOTHING in this that was BTB or even demeaning towards women... unless you're a slut or married to one, then your voice isn't worth hearing and this response does not exist. And yes I am proud to be that judgmental.

@mordbrand I enjoyed the little flash tale and liked how you dealt with the "bull" in this one. How many so called studs are actually stupid enough to take injury let-alone possible prison time and death over a hoe? These are usually the same idiots saying "bros before hoes" after all.

Really guys?

This is what passes for a good story? 1 page of an emotionless man and a woman too stupid to even come close to being based on a real person. Really?

@elHosed

anon was probably referring to the fact that:

1. this story has ZERO erotic content
2. women that stupid DON'T EXIST in real life, they are just a common stereotype in this type of tales

I like a BTB story all right but this thing is just too stupid, even for a short.

so-called "stupid wife"............

so the commentariat slams against authors who characterize a wife as "braindead stupid", right? I mean no guys even marries a woman that stupid in the first place, right? If he stays married that long to a woman that criminally insane, and/or stupid, then it becomes HIS fault.....JUST FOR STAYING WITH HER!

Not just this, but even more backlash comes through by saying that the author MUST HATE WOMEN, to characterize them so, and mysogeny runs rampent throughout the entire BTB genre! Right? Hmmm.........

Just like with the creative writing device called IMAGERY, (look it up in your college textbook, Mr. Critic) Sometimes an author's descriptive words relate a feeling more than they express some universal truth.

I submit, for THIS author here in THIS story, as well as other such maligned authors utilizing the "stupid women" trope, HE DIDN"T SAY THAT ALL WOMEN ARE THAT STUPID! HE DIDN"T EVEN SAY THAT THIS WOMEN WAS THAT STUPID, ALL THE TIME, EVERE SINCE THEY FIRST MET!

HE IS SAYING TO THE AUDIENCE, THAT A WOMEN THAT MIGHT THINK A PLAN LIKE THIS WAS ACTUALLY A GOOD IDEA, INSTEAD OF THE PREAMBLE TO THE DIVORCE ACTION THAT IT WAS, THEN THERE.......

THAT...........THAT IDEA

IS STUPID!

calling people you don't know names and making assumptions about their personal life beyond writing fictional stories populated with made-up people is getting really tiresome for me. AND I LOVE TO READ COMMENTS! But broken- record shit in the comments is just as bad as any author's story-telling that tells the same plot over and over again, only changing the names and the story titles. My fellow commenters should ALSO strive to find some originality in their comments, and endeavor to find something new to say that might actually HELP an author or other readers with a fresh perspective, hopefully infused with constructive intent.

Author, thanks for your efforts.
Not as creative as it could have been, but easy to digest, and accomplished the goals you set for yourself. Good job, and keep writing.

(Yes, this IS how I feel, but I get tired of writing similar or the same things in comment after comment)

Luckily for me, there are so few decent strories here, it really is like mining for that diamond in the ruff. I open a story like this today, and instinctivly hope for more. If this is all the author can give, I appreciate the effort anyway, but maybe soon the same author who got inspired with this "quick idea" will eventually find themselves channeling that same inspiration into something bigger, more profound, and a little more entertainingly complex.

Well here's hoping..........

Jeepers...

Let's see, our hero's wife comes home with a college boy and a yarn about making their sex lives better. Husband gets mad, scares off college boy, calls wife's low-life friend to come pick her up, and tells wife to plan for divorce. I don't get it? What's the problem?

The next steps I would assume would be six fold. First change the locks. Second, contact a lawyer to get the legal thing moving. Third, encourage wife to get some serious counseling. Fourth, sit down and contemplate what's really going on? Is wife really that stupid? Was this the result of the day last week when she fell off the roof and hit her head on the concrete sidewalk? Are her parents still angry because they think she married the wrong guy? Fifth, try to decide if she's worth the aggravation to consider any kind of reconciliation? And last, get out of the house and start looking for someone prettier, smarter, and more trustworthy.

This was a fun short story. I certainly had a good time, and well worth the five points. If you took it any further it would just unnecessarily complicate things.

Jedd Clampett

Misogynist

@ Anon Good BTB story shows newer (better) wife to the main character ex husband who is similar good woman as you mentioned you met in your life.
What is the problem to like such fantasy stories where the husbands are not creampieeating spinless week cuck characters and they get rid of the fantasy stupid or evil cheating wives? If somebody prefers faithful women that means to be misogynist a lot of women have to live same men or they must live bisexual cuckold husbands, serial cheater husbands or covered homosexual husbands they are not misogynist according to you, mainly the the serial cheater husbands are not misogynist, because they fucks many women beside their wives!.

Enjoyed it

It was a fun, short read. Thanks for the effort!

Thanks

You know what humor is - to the bone.
Stories, hell, there are a hundred a day on this site alone.
Humor - an art of the unexpected.
Your first 8 or 10 paragraphs - damn dude, you can make the pope piss himself.

The rest of the story smelled like an eight day old fish. But your humor - top end

re: VASTIESMITH2

You're a "FLAMER", but for once in your life you did rate a story properly. Yea, this was a five star read. But then vastie didn't really read it, just gave her usual five star rating. Once in a while she does hit it right. Stupid broad.

Hm

Well constructed and paced, and a very reasonable length for what is really a slight and lighthearted tale. Well-done for what it is.

However, the fantastical tales of stupid, stupid women who basically do whatever the closest person to them says to do, and strutting peacock accomplices who run at the first word edgewise, is boring to me. I get some of the appeal. They are certainly easier to write than a story about developed characters. I imagine they can be a crutch for people not pushing themselves, or who don't have more than 40 minutes to write their entire tale in. For readers, they're bascially the fast food of quick reads. But the rewards are ultimately as slight as the effort required to create them.

You have talent. I have fingers crossed that you will try to do something remarkable with it, and not fall into the StangStar trap of "if I repeat myself endlessly, I won't have to try anything new and the people who liked last weeks story will always be counted on to like this week's story, too."

This was okay.

It is fairly well written and put together. My problem with it is that it's just a rehash of a thousand other stories on this site. I was looking for at least a little different twist. Something to distinguish it from all the others but aside from using different names it was exactly like all the others.

Just the other day, "BigK10" wrote a story with a well used plot but the way he confronted the problem was unique. LTW wrote almost the same story as this but again, the way his approach in solving the problem was different.

There has to be something, anything that makes the story stand out. Unfortunately that was not the case here. I still gave it 4 stars but had to subtract one for originality.

It is possible...

...to be goth intelligent and stupid. All it took, in this FICTIONAL story, is the delusion that because she wanted it, her husband would go along with her faulty reasoning. Where does the fault lie? With her "best friend." My wife has a best friend. They talk on the phone for hours. Fortunately, we are all in our 70s, and the fires are damped down. Could it have happened in the past? I don't know. I choose to think not. Did I ever cheat? Yes, for three years, and I ultimately confessed because of the guilt I felt. Did it hurt my marriage? I don't know, but 20+ years later, we're still married. Do I regret cheating? No. She is a wonderful woman, divorced from an alcoholic, who successfully raised three kids on her own. I still miss her...but not the guilt.

The woman in this story has no insight into her husband's attitudes, and, if the divorce is allowed to happen, will resent it. Tough s---, lady. Our hero handled it correctly.

Wimp wife?

@ Cheater Anon. For a woman to find a decend second mate is a difficult thing after 50 years old against a man! She forgave you because for her interest was a calm retired life............Was your wife a wimp?

SOMETIMES WHEN YOU GET DRESSED AND LEAVE FOR WORK

You are just asking for trouble. TK U MLJ LV NV

Woe is me.

I'm a poor dumb mother fucker. My wife is dumb as a brick, my dog ran away, and this beer is skunky.

Not too entertaining, is it? Cardboard characters in an unimaginative plot.

I loved it.

A refreshing story. Thank you for posting something with out some fag husband and whore wife eating cum together. Look forward to your next post. # 5

Lit really should simply have the Unoriginalist

comment on each story. Then we'd have a good idea of the strengths and weaknesses of the story. He really has some excellent, very well thought out comments. He could be a critic for the New York Times.

Neither realistic nor adequately fantastic

I felt the story fell between what I appreciate as two interesting genres of LW stories.

I couldn't see a situation like this ever being remotely possible, so there's no realism to it and no character development.

And I didn't see it as a well-developed fantasy either. Neither the wife's fantasy of extra-marital involvement with her 'stud', nor the husband's fantasy of retribution on the wife and her 'friend' was done well.

L

Bad, Bad, Bad

All I have to say is that this is a bad story. 1*

Fun Read

I enjoted the short story, Maybe my 5 will wipe out the little anons 1. I especially like the prelude to the "whuppin".

A dumb story about the usual cliche...

Having read this type over and over again.
At least a minimum of fantasy would have made this story more interesting, but...

Good story!

I enjoyed your short tale and appreciated your slant on the husbands warning to his wife's supposed lover. Perfect! I would have loved to read a follow up of the wife's side of her fiasco and how she handles her new reality without her husband.

page 1

So did you forget to post the rest

Once again, flash story clearly just means too lazy to write anything original, interesting or developed. Or, you know, erotic, but I guess it's stupid to expect either erotica or literature on this literary erotica site with the sad state loving wives is in.

Pretty standard stuff

At least there were no willing cuckolds. Not a bad way to dump a cheating wife. But it would have been interesting to know whether or not she took him to the cleaners in their divorce? Some other information would have been nice too. Simple, good story. I'd rather read a dozen stories like this than even one story about some cuckold.