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Blooming
The flower's on a tree do not all bloom at the same time...
And those that bloom last are most remembered...Art
Actually a pretty good haiku
typically haiku is untitled, but on occasion you'll see it. There is a nice break between the calla lilly folds and the moist. Don't confine yourself to the 17 syllables, the 17 syllables actually refers to onji, which are the Japanese equivalent to English syllables, only shorter. Most English language haiku is now written in less than 17 syllables, more closely resembling the Japanese original. By working to less than 17 syllables you can make your good haiku even that much more succinct.
something like
"dew trickles
on Calla Lilly
moist folds glisten"
by dropping the ing endings, you make the haiku more "in the moment"...
Either way, a very sexy haiku... well done.
jim : )
Spelling
trickeling = trickling
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