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Cannot wait to read the rest! Superb!
Thanks, you're a real fan...
and I appreciate it. First, got to submit a slightly edited version of this one to correct a few minor but annoying typos. For example, where Debbie asks Janey: "Janey, you want to now?" It is supposed to be "GO now..." An annoying omission. Sounds as though Debbie might be asking if Debbie wants to have sex, now, which makes no sense. A later statement clarifies, but readers get stopped by these things. I think I mentioned once or twice that I have two full-length sex novels published under the name Ellen Pierce Melville...available on Amazon. Thanks again for the encouragement...
Racists garbage
Not even a story. More like an opening paragraph. Real bad attempt at story telling.
I intended realism, not racism...
but very possibly this thing isn't worth continuing. I will have to think about it.
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