More please, great story by a great writer. I need to read about Jack fucking your beautiful hole while wearing those hot black panties.
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Anonymous12/09/15
Ho-hum
Wow, don't take much to turn anyone on around here, if you think this unimaginative mess is good. I think a better name for the author would be BOLLOCKSHALL!
To the anon asshole please don't abuse the author or the people that read and enjoy what has been submitted. Just because YOU don't like it doesn't mean others in this large world with far more intelligence than YOU can't enjoy this writers stories. YOU don't even have the testicular fortitude ( sorry I will have to translate that for YOU, it means having the balls to not doing an anon post).
If you don't like a story, move on, read some other story that YOU like and complement (sorry translation needed enjoy) the author. They would appreciate (sorry translation needed (LIKE) your positive feed back.
Watch your verb tenses - in the middle of the fifth paragraph you slipped from present tense to past tense and stayed in that the rest of the story.
Personally, i don't generally care for stories written in present tense, unless they are Damon Runyon-type stories, and then i find that usually i enjoy them very much, but it is sad that these days there do not seem to be any guys (or dolls, for that matter) who write like that successfully...
English
So many possibilities were this could go.
You had me with the black thong panties.
More please, great story by a great writer. I need to read about Jack fucking your beautiful hole while wearing those hot black panties.
Ho-hum
Wow, don't take much to turn anyone on around here, if you think this unimaginative mess is good. I think a better name for the author would be BOLLOCKSHALL!
To the anon asshole
To the anon asshole please don't abuse the author or the people that read and enjoy what has been submitted. Just because YOU don't like it doesn't mean others in this large world with far more intelligence than YOU can't enjoy this writers stories. YOU don't even have the testicular fortitude ( sorry I will have to translate that for YOU, it means having the balls to not doing an anon post).
If you don't like a story, move on, read some other story that YOU like and complement (sorry translation needed enjoy) the author. They would appreciate (sorry translation needed (LIKE) your positive feed back.
A suggestion
Watch your verb tenses - in the middle of the fifth paragraph you slipped from present tense to past tense and stayed in that the rest of the story.
Personally, i don't generally care for stories written in present tense, unless they are Damon Runyon-type stories, and then i find that usually i enjoy them very much, but it is sad that these days there do not seem to be any guys (or dolls, for that matter) who write like that successfully...
Quite imaginative and intriguing
Lovely and totally believable. Got me wet all over.
Hugs & kisses,
Di
Believable
A nice, believable story. Could be anyone of us
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