Very good start and setting the stage.
HOT Story
...dialogue and interaction between the 2 of them. It's really building up. Run-ons still an issue, but 5 anyway.
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good build up
Very good start and setting the stage.
nice
HOT Story
Good...
...dialogue and interaction between the 2 of them. It's really building up. Run-ons still an issue, but 5 anyway.
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