...aren't representative of everyone. You've got a good start and the best way to get better is to keep cranking out work. There are a few typos here and there which can be cleaned up, but over all your grammar is fine. The story itself.... well I started with this chapter. I need to go back and read, then I'll comment on content.
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Anonymous12/12/15
Amazing
I like your story a lot. It has the right mixture of sex and character developing. Keep it up!
English
Well played
Excellent example of dominance and subspace.
Garbage
Mundane, non-erotic drivel.
The other Anons....
...aren't representative of everyone. You've got a good start and the best way to get better is to keep cranking out work. There are a few typos here and there which can be cleaned up, but over all your grammar is fine. The story itself.... well I started with this chapter. I need to go back and read, then I'll comment on content.
Amazing
I like your story a lot. It has the right mixture of sex and character developing. Keep it up!
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