Yes, a very clinical and logical approach to a problem that must occur from time to time to single women and indeed to married couples though the latter carries significant potential physiological problems.
But as a Literotica story it is perhaps a little too clinical to be really effective. Nevertheless it warrants a 5 star rating if only as an encouragement for the author to continue to write. So lets see what comes next from her pen.
Another reader called the writing clinical. I find that the writing is most likely a key to the personality of a writer. A person who thinks before acting and is levelheaded would write like this. Very good in my opinion. 5*
Very good first story submission! A little too clinical and a little too short! Develop your characters - with background and why they tick! I'd like to read more about Roger's relationship with his wife.
I appreciate not having to read about penis size and the vagina juice all through this story. I usually skip through that part of a story anyway.
Just MY opinion but I didn't get any romance vibe from this. Roger should've just dumped the fiancé instead of cheating. It seem like he didn't care enough for her anyway nor did Adeline. If they did they would not have cheated. But it all worked out in the end.
I enjoyed this story because of your pleasant tone; I think you rode the line between excessive "clinicality" and dry exposition. I hope you will continue your efforts as I find your work charming.
I enjoyed your story quite a bit. It hit the proper tone of a practical woman coming up with a somewhat unconventional solution to her problem - combined with the chemistry of two people who like and respect each other discovering and expressing more.
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Clinical. . . . and yet
Yes, a very clinical and logical approach to a problem that must occur from time to time to single women and indeed to married couples though the latter carries significant potential physiological problems.
But as a Literotica story it is perhaps a little too clinical to be really effective. Nevertheless it warrants a 5 star rating if only as an encouragement for the author to continue to write. So lets see what comes next from her pen.
A very good story.
Another reader called the writing clinical. I find that the writing is most likely a key to the personality of a writer. A person who thinks before acting and is levelheaded would write like this. Very good in my opinion. 5*
I liked your first story
Very good first story submission! A little too clinical and a little too short! Develop your characters - with background and why they tick! I'd like to read more about Roger's relationship with his wife.
Lovely!
Sweet and yet sexy story...thank you!
I appreciate not having to read about penis size and the vagina juice all through this story. I usually skip through that part of a story anyway.
Just MY opinion but I didn't get any romance vibe from this. Roger should've just dumped the fiancé instead of cheating. It seem like he didn't care enough for her anyway nor did Adeline. If they did they would not have cheated. But it all worked out in the end.
Nice one!
Enjoyed it! Perhaps a bit more passion next time.
charming
I enjoyed this story because of your pleasant tone; I think you rode the line between excessive "clinicality" and dry exposition. I hope you will continue your efforts as I find your work charming.
great story
just a bit short.
Nicely Done
I enjoyed your story quite a bit. It hit the proper tone of a practical woman coming up with a somewhat unconventional solution to her problem - combined with the chemistry of two people who like and respect each other discovering and expressing more.
I look forward to reading more of your stories.
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