Friday Night At The Alhanbra

Happy Day

I got two stories from authors I read.

This entertained but not a lot of new ground. Why was never covered. I like the conflict stories much better.

This could have been enlivened if the ex husband brought a civil suit against Ms. Moneybags in the near future. Not that he deserves a dime, but it would have been some conflict.

Thanks for the offering.

Last Paragraph Says it All

The last paragraph made this story. Otherwise it was kind of matter of fact, eh. Caring about a person, loving them, strangely does not end when you find out that they are a piece of shit. That horrible state of being tied to a turd by - love, and not being able to cut that tie - is terrible.

I gave it 5 stars ...

... I like it for its straight ahead writing style, believable plot line and conclusion. The story moves along quickly from point to point without repeating dialog or action. This is my kind of story. The good guys got a win, but no slaughter and the "B's" were burn. All of this was done in 3 pages. I enjoyed the read. Thank you from the Panther fan.

1star

this sucked so much !!!!

As @FD45 says: "Today is a happy day in LW"!!!

As @FD45 says: "Today is a happy day in LW"!!! A good story from JPB...3*

JPB , Loving Wives Laureate !

If one enjoys this genre as much as I do , then you will come to the conclusion (at least I have) that JPB is the master ! sure their have been a few writers who are in the mix, but at conclusion, they didn't have the staying power of Bob. Not all of JPB's stories are to my personal taste, but even those are thought provoking in their own right. Papatoad,and HDK are both crown princes , but on sheer volume of work JPB carries the title of King !
For best singular stories then qhml1 , Rehnquist , Oshaw, dtiversion and a few others have created singular masterpeices ( or more than that ) but the overwhelming collection of JPB's library of work has no equal !
I certainly wish him well and that his creative juices keep flowing onto our screens so that we may enjoy the the fruits of his literary orchard ! Thanks Bob.

Thanks Bob!

You must have had several stories saved up, and I have been enjoying your recent contributions. As far as this little tale, I have only two comments:

I have long thought that hooking up with the "other guy's" wife after or during a divorce action was silly. I have thought descriptions of these type of revenge/ rebound trysts were less likely in real life. That said, what stands out here was that even though he got to tag Norma for awhile, it did NOT turn into happily-ever-after. So yes, I appreciated that detail.
One weakness of this format style, is leaving Vykki (very unique spelling-cool!) as a minor to non-entity character. We don't learn anything about or from her. Norma's story is told in more complete detail than Vykki's. This is a story about the destruction of a marriage (well, actually TWO marriages), but adequate background on our narrator's own marriage is conspicuously absent. The result is a lack of balance. You instinctively make up for this with Norma, but more character development of Vykki would have been better. If comparisons and contrasts were to be made, and they are describing Norma to VYKKI, then we needed to get more of her side, somehow before the story was over.
But no matter, this entry ("just another cheating wife story") did exactly what it was supposed to do. Entertain, and remind us why we all seem to count JPB as one of LW's best guilty pleasures.
Thanks Again!

Bob glad your back in the groove

We like most of your stories as you are no 1 in writing stories in this catagory. Please keep them coming . Another good one.

Just plain bad

Nothing interesting here. Nothing erotic, nothing not in the "formula." Quantity does not equal quality. Writing a billion bad stories and a dozen good ones just makes the good ones hard to find. A badly sub-par effort.

What "Just Plain Bad" said.

This story is paint-by-numbers formulaic and not erotic.

ditto - JPB is mailing them in at this point

Formula, virtually similar dialogue, stories about self-righteous assholes - that's JPB.
His knowledge of family law is trapped somewhere between 1950 and the divorced losers' fantasy world.
Write about sex and feelings, Bob - you're good at that. You suck at BTB.

What's this stupidity??

How could you write this boneheaded bullshit??..

You wrote: (The police must have bought our story because she was only charged with discharging a firearm within the city limits...)

If the police bought the story of her defending herself against an attack by a full grown man with a BASEBALL BAT, why would she be charged with ANYTHING??? The ONLY way that would happen is if the guy had POLITICAL connections in a DEMOCRAT administration, which this guy doesn't have, so you must have you're head buried in your ass.

This why I come to LW first everyday...

the classic wife screws up plot. And JPB is one of the best. I agree with "Anon - Thanks Bob" that Vykki's character could have been developed more. All we really knew about her is their house belonged to her solely, and she worked outside the home. More could have been given.
Saw about 3 grammar problems, but didn't copy them down.
Wife screws up. Whether it turns out RAAC or BTB, I like them and not the cuckold husband dribble.
5 *'s as usual.

Very good JPB story.

Just what I like in a loving wife tale! Idiotic wife thinks she can have her cake and eat it too. Gets caught red-handed. Doesn't know as much about divorce as she thinks. Gets screwed by her own doing nothing. I was surprised at the end when he said that he was sorry to lose her. Maybe some more background on Vykki's side of the story and reasons for her cheating would have been fun, but this was a good read just as it sits. Not everyone's cup of tea, but then no story posted in loving wives these days makes everybody happy. In fact, a lot of us "Anon's" seem to be unhappy with everything. Oh well. Eat shit and die Bonnie/Vastie. Thanks Bob.

5 stars

for the way it oughta be, lieu of the way it is.
*****

JPB does it again

I like the fact that he was dancing with his own wife , punched, kicked then she saw the pictures and worked him over more. Classic . Thanks BOB. 5 *

Great story but ....

You and your POS Llama. 380 crap guns. Thursday night special dud machine.

Entertaining tale

I agree that the last few lines summed up my feelings about the situation. Why, oh why? I thought we were happy....

I gave this five stars but...

It really hurt. I'm a Ravens fan. We've got nineteen players on injured reserve. Only two starters on offense are still playing. I thought the Sea Hawks coach and R. Sherman were just a little too excited about winning yesterday. Most people around here are either Steelers or Ravens fans, but the antagonism isn't mean or angry, not like the anger felt about 'Ole Cheatin Brady'. I mean the guy is good; why did he feel he had to cheat to win? We're not fans of Denver either. Most of us locals have tended to see Elway as some kind of egoist. Of course, though few of us like the Red Skins, old Doug Williams took some of the swagger out of John once. And oh yeah, about Denver; well we'll always have Jacoby Jones and that great catch! Ha ha.

The story was OK, nothing new, nothing particularly original, pretty much boilerplate JPB, 'I got her off eleven times while I got off seven times myself'; the Wilt Chamberlain syndrome. Also we never got to meet Vykki; there might have been a story there.

But there weren't any happy cuckolds, no 'oh good I get to slurp up somebody else's semen', or ain't my wife's bull just the biggest and blackest, can't wait to slurp up some more of that stinky smegma. I love when he eats asparagus!

Keep writing JPB, but leave out the football; it's kind of painful right now.

P.S. Flacco. He might not be the best, but for years we'd get the ball on the twenty and it was like the goal line was a million miles away; you know hand it off, five yards at a time. We used to watch and hope they'd punt it away so we'd get to see our defense some more. Then one Sunday playing the Vikings Flacco showed up and the goal line got really close. It was like Unitas all over again. My wife got me a Derek Mason jersey. I got her an Ed Reed.

Keep writing Bob.

Jedd Clampett

Not very good.

Read like JPB sat down and dashed it off in one sitting.

Pretty good story but

the sex was not erotic...2*

Editor Please

"..I guessing that she will is going to find out.." Sheeeesh '

Story falls flat,

Two stories from a master in the last two weeks but both seemed to just limp over the line. The characters weren't enough to drive it forward because we've read about them so many times before. Yes, they are well formed and Bob has a way of making them real however no twist, no excitement. 3*

I happen to agree

There were no new elements in the story. The only details which strayed from normal was the cheating husband showing a few brain cells (not too many though) and the wife showing less than normal.

HOWEVER, that being said, when I read the first paragraph, I was hooked! That is a perfect lead in to a story. He was here for trouble and he expected to go to jail. It beats the fucking leaves blowing, or 'I met her at a party' etc.

Bob has a concussive, streamlined style which I really appreciate. Sometimes it is a bit too bare bones, particularly on the emotions, or in this case the motives. But a good lead in paragraph with a verbal hook, BAM!

Not realistic

All the money he had paid toward the mortgage wouldn't have been returned after all, he was living in the house. Probably would have deducted what rent would have cost him, then repaid him any overage. Jim going to prison was overkill in the revenge department.

Dear Bob,

You have written a lot of good stories. This is one of them. I was entertained for a while. Thanks.

Chocolate chip cookies have been around for a long time !

So it seems that the whole world is a critic ! I guess if chocolate chip cookies were just invented, then 5/8 ths of the commentators on this site would rail against them ! Oh how dare one be so presumptive to actually enjoy a tried and true formula for a LW story ! Oh the humanity !
I for one, do not endeavor to become an author. My grammar isn't the King's English. 95% of the actual readers of this site and category do not. We do not twist at our chains when the wrong punctuation or the wrong linking verb is used ! We do not care as much if an idea is totally original, very few actually are in the grand scheme ! What we poor, uneducated masses want is simple entertainment ! Look around you , my oh so superior commentators , what do you see ? Is it Trinity lane at Cambridge? Or maybe the ivy covered walls of Harvard common ? No, its the comments site of an erotic porn site ! Damn, so sorry to interrupt your Walter Middy daydream !
JPB has a style, and it sure does seem that a helluva lot of readers sure do enjoy it, I know I certainly do. So please go on back to your lofty perch's , and allow us common folk to simply enjoy what we like ! I for one will take some chocolate chip cookies over Crème Brulee any time !

P.S. Cavori , WTF ????

Good Read Bob****

Your stories are entertaining I like them. Thanks for sharing my friend.

Nice

The bottom line here is the cheaters lost out in the end. No real revenge or consequences, but two slimy cheaters bit the dust. Good tale.

I enjoyed the read, but miss the human element of understanding, "Why?"

I can accept that animals fuck because they have the opportunity, that's their nature. But a married person, especially a woman, fucks to compensate for something lacking in the marriage. Its always interesting to read how an author imagines and explains the reasoning behind the actions. But maybe that's just me. JPB seldom delves into the "why" of cheating, so most of his stories leave me feeling that I don't really know the whole story, the real story.

Why on earth would Vykki claim to still love her husband, to want to stay married, to think that she could explain and atone for her incredibly cruel, prolonged, and enthusiastic cheating? I would find it interesting to read that story. But I must turn to other authors for that depth of human investigation and analysis. I always wonder how any man could be married to such a shallow souless selfish woman and not see her true nature before they even got to the wedding ceremony, much less staying blind for some time during the marriage. Just reinforces my observation that if you overlook the smoke until you feel the flames, its too late to bother putting out the fire. Just let it burn and start over. But accept responsibility for ignoring the smoke and the smell until its too late to save things. Vykki claims she wanted to talk things over after she was caught. He should have forced that confrontation as soon as he sensed there was a problem in their relationship. His ignoring the smoke and smell of the fire she was starting begs the question, what else was this husband overlooking, or ignoring? Not a question JPB likes to write about. So be it.

Thanks for your time and effort.

Anon- chocolate chip cookies.

To continue your cookie metaphor.
I love chocolate chip cookies. I love finding a store in a little country town that has little packets hand wrapped in plastic made by some old nanna who lives down the road. They will be sitting in a box next to the cash register with a little cardboard sign telling you the price. I'll buy them every time because they are made with love and care probably from a recipe handed down through the family. They aren't all perfectly round and some have more chocolate than others or something far out like ginger and it makes them even more enjoyable.
If you buy the packets from the supermarket every cookie is the same. They are mass produced to be completely uniform and are guaranteed to taste exactly the same as the last packet you bought. Comforting for the masses but me, I like the adventure and surprise of jumping into the unknown.

Sometimes the homemade cookies might not be fantastic but at least I don't know before I start exactly how they are going to taste.

Classic JPB

Personally I find it hard to dismissively try to categorize a JPB story. He has written SO many stories and from such a variety of styles, that it seems ridiculous to call this another 'JPB BTB' story.

The cheating wife in this case had no physical injury, minimal personal embarrassment, and seemingly fair financial treatment. But I guess that for some readers any LW story that isn't RAAC and ends in divorce is automatically BTB.

I actually enjoyed the limited development of the cheating wife's character. I find it hard not to scan through the usual high school sweetheart or met her in college stuff especially when it doesn't have any bearing on the decision to cheat. And I admire the betrayed husband's decision not to meet with his ex and hear her reasons. What possible legitimate reason could she give for cheating anyway? It's always the same confused nonsense that self-deluded cheaters spout to rationalize their selfish behavior to themselves.

I'm aware of the argument that the confrontation is necessary for 'closure', but always wondered for whose closure? The injured spouse has zero reason to believe ANYTHING good or bad that the betrayer says.

And it's hard to see how this is formula, he does have some hot sex with the divorcee but doesn't exactly drive off into the sunset in his blacked out mustang with her. Instead he seems emotionally damaged, saddened and wistful for what his life could have been like if his ex had not decided to destroy their marriage with her infidelity.

Unfortunately that seems a lot like nitty, gritty REAL life, something that JPB seems good at relating. But the RAAC folks probably don't like real life very much either, as it rarely fits their fantasy that marriages can survive this level of betrayal & disrespect.

Please keep writing JPB, with your broad range I can't promise that I'll enjoy every story as much as this one, but I do promise to read them.

5 stars.

Good read and it had an ending

It was a good read and it had an ending. Maybe could have had some details but I don't have a problem with not knowing the reason she cheated. Thanks for writing and sharing. Not sure I need to say it but please continue your writing and I do appreciate your effort.

Another great story from a master storyteller on Lit.

Well plotted, and truthful.

5 star

A good straight forward win for the good folks, thank heavens Bob is back! I was starting to think that the cuck loving fairies were saturating LW forever.

One or two things...

"I told the cops to make sure that they handled the baseball bat carefully as it was evidence."

Yes, because the police wouldn't have known that.

"The police must have bought our story because she was only charged with discharging a firearm within the city limits and then released on her own recognizance."

Charged? For defending herself? I don't thinks so!

"The other not so good thing was that the DA was running for reelection and wouldn't drop the charges against Norma. We figured that it was because his opponent could try to use it against him saying he was soft on crime."

And he uses a misdemeanour like this? Really?

Good story.

Some folks found certain aspects of the story hard to believe apparently. Since every author has the privilege of writing their story any way they want, I usually only comment about liking or disliking their story. A good story teller can take any liberties they wish so long as their story holds my interest and leaves me thinking I wouldn't mind reading it again.
Having said that I can also say that I wish Bob had written a portion of this story from Vykki's perspective so we could know what the motivation to cheat was. The story is good Bob. Thank you for sharing. I have enjoyed your work for many years.
If anyone would like to respond to my comments you may contact me at jbunch34@yahoo.com.

In what state can you get charged with discharging a firearm in self-defense ? I want to make sure l never move there.

missing

I missed hearing all the rationalizations the bitch would have come with. JPB is usually pretty entertaining in his dialogues. I missed the jokes he sometimes shares in his stories.