great story, spicey just like yourself! i can't wait to see more from you. it's a little hazey for me in parts, but i think you did a wonderful job, it's not your typical porn story.
in much shibbyness
-vanessa
Wow! Amazing, the flow, the feel, the direction and the detail were all just amazing. The story pulled me in, frawing me further into it, as the scene I was reading played out vividly in my mind. Your selection of words leave nothing unknown, without going over the top, and into the realm of blatant pornography. I loved how your extant use of emotion seemed to draw me through the physical sensations described, giving them a realistic quality, something more than flat images on paper. I can see from this how this would be seen as a punishment, but was truly ended with a caring, encompassing emotion, as is proper. Your use of the flashback technique is excellent, filling in the details, without drawing away from the event at hand, and blending perfectly to adjoin the two into one as the bulk of the action is played out.
I read the whole damn thing today. The whole anal + men thing isn't my scene, but it's clear that the best scene is the one with the blonde. Everything up to that point reads fast and blurred, but it's as if the moment you get to that one point, where you see her face, time stops, the scene reads slowly, and you can tell you put a lot more into it than you did the rest of the story. Good work babe.
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Anonymous12/08/06
ass loving
i adored the story,being a bisexual woman,i just love having my gorgeous ass taken smoothly or roughly,ive a bi hubby too and i love watching him with his lovers as they take his lovely ass with their big cocks,very wet making,keep up the stories pl,i just love them
I do agree - the part with the blonde is absolutely awesome! I have a few fantasies of being the girl with the strap on :P I'm going to read some of your other stories!
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Anonymous01/02/14
If was my Master
If that was my Master I would have finished with him as soon as he started the punishment as it was abuse not bdsm
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great story, spicey just like yourself! i can't wait to see more from you. it's a little hazey for me in parts, but i think you did a wonderful job, it's not your typical porn story.
in much shibbyness
-vanessa
Amazing..
This was absolutely amazing!
Loved it!!!
Pet, you know I really enjoyed the story. I hope you are inspired again soon. ;)
thoroughly enjoyable
Thanks for the story. I look forward to reading the rest of your submissions. So lifelike in it's description. You are good!!
Amazing!
Fabulous story! So good it probably shouldn't just remain in the realm of fiction! :-D
Wow
Wow! Amazing, the flow, the feel, the direction and the detail were all just amazing. The story pulled me in, frawing me further into it, as the scene I was reading played out vividly in my mind. Your selection of words leave nothing unknown, without going over the top, and into the realm of blatant pornography. I loved how your extant use of emotion seemed to draw me through the physical sensations described, giving them a realistic quality, something more than flat images on paper. I can see from this how this would be seen as a punishment, but was truly ended with a caring, encompassing emotion, as is proper. Your use of the flashback technique is excellent, filling in the details, without drawing away from the event at hand, and blending perfectly to adjoin the two into one as the bulk of the action is played out.
Finally
I read the whole damn thing today. The whole anal + men thing isn't my scene, but it's clear that the best scene is the one with the blonde. Everything up to that point reads fast and blurred, but it's as if the moment you get to that one point, where you see her face, time stops, the scene reads slowly, and you can tell you put a lot more into it than you did the rest of the story. Good work babe.
ass loving
i adored the story,being a bisexual woman,i just love having my gorgeous ass taken smoothly or roughly,ive a bi hubby too and i love watching him with his lovers as they take his lovely ass with their big cocks,very wet making,keep up the stories pl,i just love them
A Very hot tale
makes me wish i was me with girls with strapons
And shemales,a sexy wicked story
Great story..!!!
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Damn...
Absolutely Amazing....I got wet just reading this. (:
Very nice!
I do agree - the part with the blonde is absolutely awesome! I have a few fantasies of being the girl with the strap on :P I'm going to read some of your other stories!
If was my Master
If that was my Master I would have finished with him as soon as he started the punishment as it was abuse not bdsm
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