Inappropriate, my ass. As with the rest of your work, I loved it.
- Mindy
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Anonymous01/24/04
well
it was dry, sorry.
by
Anonymous01/24/04
A GOOD Story
Ms. D'Artois - - -
I must agree with Mindy... It is indeed appropriate, and is well done, however brief. Please bear in mind that one does not have to read the gory details of getting it on in order to be pleased or touched by a story. The category was ROMANCE, and it was dead on target. I will look up more of your works. Ignore the naysayers. It is MORE DIFFICULT to write without using graphic language.
Take care,
Boswell
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Anonymous02/02/04
Short, sweet read
Not really the type of story I come here for, but it was refreshing with a nice twist. Since it was short, I didn't miss the actual sex.
Truly effortless writing. Considering the fact that the story spanned about six months and moved from one place to the other and days too, the transitions were nice and smooth. No rough bits in between. That's what struck me first as I was reading it. :)
It was sweet and the lack of sex didn't trouble me, in fact it was refreshing among the others stuffed full of detailed sex.
English
What can I say? This is great!
What devious minds most women have! As a conversation or relationship starter, this would be a great idea!
Hmm
Doesn't seem very erotic. A bit inappropriate for the site.
I see anonymous is at it again...
Inappropriate, my ass. As with the rest of your work, I loved it.
- Mindy
well
it was dry, sorry.
A GOOD Story
Ms. D'Artois - - -
I must agree with Mindy... It is indeed appropriate, and is well done, however brief. Please bear in mind that one does not have to read the gory details of getting it on in order to be pleased or touched by a story. The category was ROMANCE, and it was dead on target. I will look up more of your works. Ignore the naysayers. It is MORE DIFFICULT to write without using graphic language.
Take care,
Boswell
Short, sweet read
Not really the type of story I come here for, but it was refreshing with a nice twist. Since it was short, I didn't miss the actual sex.
Really good writing
Truly effortless writing. Considering the fact that the story spanned about six months and moved from one place to the other and days too, the transitions were nice and smooth. No rough bits in between. That's what struck me first as I was reading it. :)
It was sweet and the lack of sex didn't trouble me, in fact it was refreshing among the others stuffed full of detailed sex.
blahhhhh
im sorry it was so lacking in character that it read like a newspaper roport on a couple it was just too short . "Jakk"
fun twist
I would've enjoyed some more development here, I mean more time is spent on his feelings for hte ex than his feelings for Monica, but the end was fun.
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