5 stars and favorited. Please write more . Love the woman's perspective too!
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Anonymous12/18/15
Not too keen...........
..........on first person, present, tense.
I have similar reservations about stories in which the narrator uses the rather artificial convention of saying to another person, something on the lines of, " I look into your eyes, I see your smile, I kiss your lips..........etc."
I do like first person stories though, as long a the narrator is addressing the reading public.
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Anonymous12/20/15
Deep, erotic musings aren't dictated by grammar book
This is a very well-done story. I'm a veteran of virtual worlds where often the para (paragraph) RP (role-play) rules as king. From experience, I've found that the shorter, concise, yet descriptive entries drive the most erotic energy exchange by both sexual partners...never grammatically perfect, yet soooo intimate. I sense that level of intimacy in this story.
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Fantastic writing !
I love your story ! Please share more with us. It is uncommon to be able to read from the womans point of view and I love it !
5 stars and favorited. Please write more . Love the woman's perspective too!
Not too keen...........
..........on first person, present, tense.
I have similar reservations about stories in which the narrator uses the rather artificial convention of saying to another person, something on the lines of, " I look into your eyes, I see your smile, I kiss your lips..........etc."
I do like first person stories though, as long a the narrator is addressing the reading public.
Deep, erotic musings aren't dictated by grammar book
This is a very well-done story. I'm a veteran of virtual worlds where often the para (paragraph) RP (role-play) rules as king. From experience, I've found that the shorter, concise, yet descriptive entries drive the most erotic energy exchange by both sexual partners...never grammatically perfect, yet soooo intimate. I sense that level of intimacy in this story.
Very nice
I like the story and the writing. THAT has happened to me many many times EXCEPT the spouse 99 out of 100 wanted to be left alone.....
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