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Wtf?
Let's not be unclear: What the fuck?
Open the window - Stockholm wants to be let out.
Wrong dude died, but all is forgiven if you let this story grow horns. He wouldn't have made it out the building anyway. Okay - this is how it rolls - grab a computer and get busy. NOW, what are you blinking at?
Shot for the crazyness.
Evebroughtanaxthistime
Repeat WTF
Gotta agree, WTF! This could have been good until the ending
Ending sucked
Yes the ending sucked but most origin stories do! The only reason people are pissed is because it was written well! Excited to see where the next chapter goes!
wtf apologizes
Oh shit, did it again. Tried to be witty when I know full wellI I can't write and it gets worse when I don't sleep. Sorry. Can see what I did. Just as well I came back. The ending was actually pretty damn good. Okay, it was pretty damn awful when the impromptu hero was slain by what should have been the most unlikely candidate in the room, but the moment the knife was in her hand, something in the text suggested to me she was gonna stab the old man. So it didn't come as a complete shock. The mother's death affected me more.
If the two of them had made it out of the building (unlikely), the old man would have been putting her life in danger, as Gunner would surely have killed her for escaping with the man once they were caught (highly likely). Therefore, in some twisted way it was self-defense. If that explanation made any sense, I'll be most relieved.
What was really cool, was her morphing into a misguided 'demon'. To let the story'grow horns' was not directed at a viking's helmet-thingy, but at her evil smile - devil's horns? It was just so surprising and I like it. It sorta kicks Stockholm syndrome round the block and then impregnates it with madness. Cannot wait to see what you do with it!
Oh yes, why I should be on knees, begging forgiveness - I should mostly just shut up, but can't help myself. It's like penis - you know you shouldn't, but it's so pretty.
Sorry again.
This is one of the best stories on here. Please rush!
Evebroughtanaxthistime
Ps probably shouldn't ask, but when he was raping her and she was looking from one parent to another, was there a touch of humor to the horror? Okay. Maybe I should shutup now. But was there...?
It is what it is
This is just an origin. Yes, leaves ya little pissed off but it opens your imagination as to what could come next. Don't be upset at how it ended, be happy that it has just begun.
Thanks for the views and the love everyone.
Nice story,but...
First, the name "Gunner" simply does not exist, his name would have been "Gunnar"
Second, you changed the name "Gudrun" to "Gudren" in the middle of the story, the correct spelling of that name would be "Gudrun".
And I have to say that giving a man a womans name to make shure he grows up to be tough, is not something that was done. Maybe today some strange people would do something like that, but a thousand years ago, it was simply unheard of.
Just to make things clear, my english is probably lousy, since I am Norwegian. (As you probably guessed.) Please forgive me for that.
And; Dont let my comments stop you from using vikings and Norway again. Some small errors does in no way mean that I dont like reading the story.:-) (As long as you dont put horns on their helmets, that is simply unacceptable.:-))
Thanks for the feedback everyone.
I have made an updated version with proper editing. I apologize for the oversight. New edited version should be up within couple days.
Didn't like the ending
Whatever sympathy I had for Astrid was lost when she killed the one person who was trying to protect her - granted Gudren wouldn't have lasted long, and Astrid would still belong to Gunner, but to acquiesce to the man that just killed her parents - don't understand or like how she could be so cold-blooded.
Sorry
The ending made no sense at all given what happened.
More
Eek! Need more. Squeel...no, but seriously - is chapter 2 far off? Cause I want more and then some more!
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