Three Square Meals Ch. 03

Yup, this is a good as I remember.

Ok. I am glad I decided to reread this. After getting many chapters farther into the story I wanted to reread some while waiting for the next chapter.

I am glad I did.

John Blake and Alyssa. This chapter is the real beginning of everything. It is sweeter and hotter than I remembered it being.

After this things just get more and more crazy and so good), but this was perfect.

Yeah this is the real starting point where everything kicks off. I reread it too, as it was about 5 weeks ago when I wrote it and had forgotten most of the details. It was fun to have another look and think back on everything that's happened since that point. :)

Laundry List

This reads like a formula; she did this and he felt that and then his (insert adjective) ...

Can you write as though real people were involved rather than two dimensional stick figures?

Really is this all there is to this story?

One blow job after another...... boring and redundant..... Where's the Story? Chapter 1 was good chapter 2 was ok but you could have left out chapter 3 altogether.

I was just starting my fledgling writing exploits when I wrote Chapter 3 of this story and to be fair to the people who commented below, this chapter is probably the weakest of all 26 I've done so far. Something very important does happen in it, but that's not going to be apparent for a long time to come and probably puts people off reading further, which is a shame.

I've just edited and added a little more to chapter 1 and 2, and resubmitted them. I'm going to do the same for Chapter 3 as well.

If this is your first time reading the whole series, it gets a whole lot more involved, with lots more story later on, so bear with it. ;)

Memory Lane

It is quite interesting to come back take a peek at the early chapters again. You wrote well here and thanks for keeping up the good work all the way through.

What's the problem?

This series is great, a good enough premise and an interesting choice to go pretty much straight to the hot sex and take it slow with the story. A scenario like this has need of lengthy explanations about your imaginary galactic politics, but at this point who cares? Firefly similarly kept the details light going in to the first few episodes. We get it, there's a Cold War. Continue.

back to the start

for all u out there reading this for the first time its a really good story and really picks up around chapter 6 but that being said each chapter gets better and has a little more info then the next and dont worrie they get longer the more u progress to but as always love the story and cant wait for chapter 53 ooo yahaaa

To new readers:

This series may seem to start slowly. Sometimes there's a reason for that - please trust those of us who've gone before you. Tefler knows what he's doing: Keep going!

Superb!

Very good description, straight into the action, well done!