A decent read. I can believe this to be true and that makes it better to me.
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Anonymous01/18/16
Are you a teen virgin?
This was bad.. 6'1 160lbs is not a big guy. Couldn't cover an 8 incher with his hand really? Threatening by telling him he had to get her pregnant. What was the thing with Thank you Daddy? There was no build up for that. The sex was unrealistic... It was just bad man. The first two paragraphs are random as fuck. What's with mentioning the younger sister in the first paragraph. The mom gets a one line mention... why even mention her. You introduce the younger sister after this almost sounded like you was talking about the aunt in the paragraph that you just drop mom's a 5-star chef. Normally I can let small unrealistic details go... but when you put it on top of a bad storyline, and character build up it's just terrible and really ruins the story.
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A decent read. I can believe this to be true and that makes it better to me.
Are you a teen virgin?
This was bad.. 6'1 160lbs is not a big guy. Couldn't cover an 8 incher with his hand really? Threatening by telling him he had to get her pregnant. What was the thing with Thank you Daddy? There was no build up for that. The sex was unrealistic... It was just bad man. The first two paragraphs are random as fuck. What's with mentioning the younger sister in the first paragraph. The mom gets a one line mention... why even mention her. You introduce the younger sister after this almost sounded like you was talking about the aunt in the paragraph that you just drop mom's a 5-star chef. Normally I can let small unrealistic details go... but when you put it on top of a bad storyline, and character build up it's just terrible and really ruins the story.
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