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Too short
Try writing enough for at least one page before you post the next installment, that would give you a chance to add a little plot to it.
Not too short
I like this. No self indulgent boring background setup: you got right to the point. Some of the best descriptive words about fucking that I've read yet. Looking forward to what's next. Anal?
Thank you!
This story is quite long and has only begun. More of everything will make its way to you, should you care to continue. I appreciate all the reads, the votes and favorites! Hugs, E
Good so far.
Keep writing! Lots of potential. -- claud137
Excellent
I really like your storyline and the pace. Not too quick to get to ................ but not drawn out either. I hope you have some good twists to it soon. Maybe even go back to how Harper was seduced
want this for my wife
your daughter and you have an amazing story I hope to read more about it . this is what I pray my wife and daughter will experience
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